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JOE AND I AT NIGHT ON OREGON BEACH A SHORT WHILE AGO. SO COLD!!!!  IT WAS 4th of JULY AND I WAS WRAPPED UP LIKE  A MUMMY)

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ABOVE: Manzanita on Oregon coast, where my son lives.

Nearby Astoria

Wasted Beauty

With verdancy surrounding me, I wish to spin around this world of endless spring that I am in. Bewitched am I by forests, hills, and fields of green. If nature is a woman, here she loves to preen in emeralds whose splendor I’ve so seldom seen as I revel in our drive out to the ocean. Winding roads we travel with a zig-zag motion. Where land weds water, we breathe a magic potion. How I love this gorgeous shoreline of Oregon. We come upon a beach, so I’m expecting fun, But sky does not comply, and now we’ve lost the sun! I also notice once-blue sky has changed to grey. How happy I had been to spend time at the bay, but wind and chilly weather bring my heart dismay. The water feels so cold! I pull my sweater tight. I can’t lie on my blanket soaking in sun’s light. Oh, I long to jump some waves! This just isn’t right. Wasted beauty can’t be felt warm upon my skin! Bewitched am I by forests, hills, and fields of green as I revel in our drive out to the ocean. How I love this gorgeous shoreline of Oregon. I also notice once-blue sky has changed to grey The water feels so cold! I pull my sweater tight. Wasted beauty can’t be felt warm upon my skin! Written July 5, 2016 for The Crown of Couplets Contest Judged July 30, 2016 and now used for the I Got Zero, Nothing, Nada- 2 Poetry Contest of Broken Wings
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Roper Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 10:40 PM
Beautiful poem, Andrea, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
Neumann Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 7:42 AM
This is a very interesting take on the theme. Congratulations.
Smith Avatar
August 4, 2016 at 7:29 AM
I read this before the judging and meant to leave a note,now I'll just go ahead and congratulate you on your deserving honor...
U.D Palawon  Avatar
August 3, 2016 at 11:33 PM
Congratulation Andrea with this beautiful piece. Winter does make the landscape awful to look at. In my country, a mild winter but very nasty with non stop rain and wind! :) Sunita
Medders Tobechi Avatar
August 3, 2016 at 11:07 PM
Congratulations on your placement with the lovely poem about a lovely place....
Canerdy Avatar
August 3, 2016 at 10:33 PM
A 7 for this very descriptive WINNING poem, Andrea! Janice
Godwin Avatar
August 2, 2016 at 3:19 PM
This is the first crown of couplets that I've compared to the directions. The form does not allow for rhyme in the last stanza that combines all last lines and I'm not sure that appeals to me, but given the criteria, your poem is a beauty, the 1st stanza is especially poetic to me, I love how it flows spoken aloud, but the beauty and strong, sincere sentiment never lose their momentum. This is not a grand effort, but a grand success. I'm off to read the ones that placed, shaking my head
Martyn Avatar
July 31, 2016 at 7:49 AM
You captured Oregon just how I remember including the cold. Beautiful, tender piece.
Zerbst Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 9:10 PM
Excelente as always. I do miss the soup. Trying to come up with a spare momento for short poem.
Vaso Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 10:38 AM
Both the photos and the poem make me want to visit there! So lovely!
Quigley Avatar
July 29, 2016 at 10:47 PM
Nicely done! I was there...
Duggan Avatar
July 29, 2016 at 7:57 PM
Hi Andrea, beautifully written poem, felt like I was there as I was reading it and as for those pictures they look lovely, one place I would love to visit, maybe one day. take care my friend.......Vera
Daniel Avatar
July 29, 2016 at 1:37 AM
Nice one for the contest, Andrea:))
Y. Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 4:08 PM
Hi Andrea, This is so lovely and well written. You described everything so well it was though I was there. As always excellent job. It should do well in the contest. Best of luck in the contest. A big seven. :-) Alexis
Yvonne Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 9:08 AM
Beautiful just beautiful! A Fav! Love, armand.
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 2:49 AM
Nature speaks through the words of your beautiful poem Andrea! I love Oregon. My daughter just returned from there yesterday. She was there for six days. GL in the contest. 7 ;+)
Salehi Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 1:23 AM
That is beautiful.... good luck.... do a ghazal ... you're great at it.
Kapoor Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 11:50 PM
By your lovely photos and photogenic description of this wonderful place you have made this Poem a memorable one dear friend Andrea. My good wishes for this wonderful entry. Hope you are fine. A full 7++ for this one dear friend. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra k Kapoor
Ainsley Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 10:19 PM
Sometimes even mother nature has a bad day Andrea; She does have such a huge responsibility .There's beauty in her moodiness as well,but I understand it's a disappointment when her smile becomes a frown. I love your work it always inspires me to write.
Beaufort Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 6:48 PM
You have been prolific, but I have not been due to circumcisions beyond my control. Writing huge treatises for work and that be sapping my energy. The pictures of the coast are beautiful. Thanks for sharing. It makes me want to see it myself. Thanks so much. You are a beautiful soul.
Kendrick Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 1:39 PM
Reads like a winner..Beautiful area..I would like to go to that part of the USA where maybe the weather would be a little cooler but age and other factors will probably prohibit my getting there so I am glad to see the wonderful pictures..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara
Andresen Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 12:16 PM
- A wonderful poem Andrea, a pleasure to read about "a little piece of your life" - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Scars Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 10:21 AM
lovely Andrea! I am so glad to see someone else wrote for this contest! I loved writing it personally, I love couplets a lot though. Well done and best of luck! :)-luloo
Thirtyseven Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 9:14 AM
Oh that is magnificent. I love the photos too. Just like the title says. Best us luck with he contest. tweets away...
Kannan Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 8:20 AM
Beautifully written Andrea...Good luck in the contest...
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