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JOE AND I AT NIGHT ON OREGON BEACH A SHORT WHILE AGO. SO COLD!!!!  IT WAS 4th of JULY AND I WAS WRAPPED UP LIKE  A MUMMY)

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ABOVE: Manzanita on Oregon coast, where my son lives.

Nearby Astoria

With verdancy surrounding me, I wish to spin around this world of endless spring that I am in. Bewitched am I by forests, hills, and fields of green. If nature is a woman, here she loves to preen in emeralds whose splendor I’ve so seldom seen as I revel in our drive out to the ocean. Winding roads we travel with a zig-zag motion. Where land weds water, we breathe a magic potion. How I love this gorgeous shoreline of Oregon. We come upon a beach, so I’m expecting fun, But sky does not comply, and now we’ve lost the sun! I also notice once-blue sky has changed to grey. How happy I had been to spend time at the bay, but wind and chilly weather bring my heart dismay. The water feels so cold! I pull my sweater tight. I can’t lie on my blanket soaking in sun’s light. Oh, I long to jump some waves! This just isn’t right. Wasted beauty can’t be felt warm upon my skin! Bewitched am I by forests, hills, and fields of green as I revel in our drive out to the ocean. How I love this gorgeous shoreline of Oregon. I also notice once-blue sky has changed to grey The water feels so cold! I pull my sweater tight. Wasted beauty can’t be felt warm upon my skin! Written July 5, 2016 for The Crown of Couplets Contest Judged July 30, 2016 and now used for the I Got Zero, Nothing, Nada- 2 Poetry Contest of Broken Wings

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Date: 8/4/2016 10:40:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Andrea, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/4/2016 7:42:00 AM
This is a very interesting take on the theme. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/4/2016 7:29:00 AM
I read this before the judging and meant to leave a note,now I'll just go ahead and congratulate you on your deserving honor...
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Date: 8/3/2016 11:33:00 PM
Congratulation Andrea with this beautiful piece. Winter does make the landscape awful to look at. In my country, a mild winter but very nasty with non stop rain and wind! :) Sunita
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Date: 8/3/2016 11:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement with the lovely poem about a lovely place....
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Date: 8/3/2016 10:33:00 PM
A 7 for this very descriptive WINNING poem, Andrea! Janice
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Date: 8/2/2016 3:19:00 PM
This is the first crown of couplets that I've compared to the directions. The form does not allow for rhyme in the last stanza that combines all last lines and I'm not sure that appeals to me, but given the criteria, your poem is a beauty, the 1st stanza is especially poetic to me, I love how it flows spoken aloud, but the beauty and strong, sincere sentiment never lose their momentum. This is not a grand effort, but a grand success. I'm off to read the ones that placed, shaking my head
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Date: 7/31/2016 7:49:00 AM
You captured Oregon just how I remember including the cold. Beautiful, tender piece.
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Date: 7/30/2016 9:10:00 PM
Excelente as always. I do miss the soup. Trying to come up with a spare momento for short poem.
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Date: 7/30/2016 10:38:00 AM
Both the photos and the poem make me want to visit there! So lovely!
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Date: 7/29/2016 10:47:00 PM
Nicely done! I was there...
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Date: 7/29/2016 7:57:00 PM
Hi Andrea, beautifully written poem, felt like I was there as I was reading it and as for those pictures they look lovely, one place I would love to visit, maybe one day. take care my friend.......Vera
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Date: 7/29/2016 1:37:00 AM
Nice one for the contest, Andrea:))
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Date: 7/28/2016 4:08:00 PM
Hi Andrea, This is so lovely and well written. You described everything so well it was though I was there. As always excellent job. It should do well in the contest. Best of luck in the contest. A big seven. :-) Alexis
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Date: 7/28/2016 9:08:00 AM
Beautiful just beautiful! A Fav! Love, armand.
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Date: 7/28/2016 2:49:00 AM
Nature speaks through the words of your beautiful poem Andrea! I love Oregon. My daughter just returned from there yesterday. She was there for six days. GL in the contest. 7 ;+)
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Date: 7/28/2016 1:23:00 AM
That is beautiful.... good luck.... do a ghazal ... you're great at it.
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Date: 7/27/2016 11:50:00 PM
By your lovely photos and photogenic description of this wonderful place you have made this Poem a memorable one dear friend Andrea. My good wishes for this wonderful entry. Hope you are fine. A full 7++ for this one dear friend. Love and best wishes always...Ravindra k Kapoor
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Date: 7/27/2016 10:19:00 PM
Sometimes even mother nature has a bad day Andrea; She does have such a huge responsibility .There's beauty in her moodiness as well,but I understand it's a disappointment when her smile becomes a frown. I love your work it always inspires me to write.
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Date: 7/27/2016 6:48:00 PM
You have been prolific, but I have not been due to circumcisions beyond my control. Writing huge treatises for work and that be sapping my energy. The pictures of the coast are beautiful. Thanks for sharing. It makes me want to see it myself. Thanks so much. You are a beautiful soul.
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Date: 7/27/2016 1:39:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Beautiful area..I would like to go to that part of the USA where maybe the weather would be a little cooler but age and other factors will probably prohibit my getting there so I am glad to see the wonderful pictures..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara
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Date: 7/27/2016 12:16:00 PM
- A wonderful poem Andrea, a pleasure to read about "a little piece of your life" - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/27/2016 10:21:00 AM
lovely Andrea! I am so glad to see someone else wrote for this contest! I loved writing it personally, I love couplets a lot though. Well done and best of luck! :)-luloo
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Date: 7/27/2016 9:14:00 AM
Oh that is magnificent. I love the photos too. Just like the title says. Best us luck with he contest. tweets away...
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Date: 7/27/2016 8:20:00 AM
Beautifully written Andrea...Good luck in the contest...
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