Wasp Nest

pale paper palace
hundred hexagonal cells -
deserted fortress

3/28/2017

naturehaiku

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Line Gauthier

Date: 7/24/2018 10:51:00 PM

Well penned, Agnes.

Jannie Breedt

Date: 4/18/2017 5:51:00 AM

Hi Agnes, what a significant haiku. Its powerful in simplicity and a splendid topic. We have exactly those wasps here, the big red ones that become very defensive when the larvae hatch. One stung me in the eyelid and I wacked my eye so gard that I had a swolen eye that I kept open with a matchstick in order to drive to the chemist. It was bkack and swollen for 2 weeks. Ha ha

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/18/2017 7:06:00 AM

Thank you for visiting, Jannie. That's quite a story! yes, they can be quite aggressive if disturbed.

John Michaels

Date: 4/15/2017 5:03:00 AM

This is brilliant! Some excellent well-placed alliteration to capture the scene perfectly. Regards, John.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/15/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thanks so much, John.

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 4/6/2017 10:04:00 AM

An excellent haiku, Agnes! Your sense of observation and imagination is amazing – pale paper palace. Wish I had written it. Thanks for stopping by. Best to you in your writing endeavors. / M

Agnes Krampe
Date: 4/15/2017 7:58:00 AM

Thank you for your kind words, Maurice.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/31/2017 3:23:00 PM

A fascinating haiku, Agnes...I often come across these deserted nests and wonder what happened to all the activity and the inhabitants! It's like seeing a ghost town! ~ Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe
Date: 3/31/2017 4:21:00 PM

Thanks, Paul - I love your comparison to a ghost town, might have to steal that :)

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 3/31/2017 2:44:00 PM

Nature is so amazing. The tone of this Haiku conveys the emptiness of this 'fortress' that was once alive with stinging, flying insects. Good Luck in the contest.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 3/31/2017 4:20:00 PM

Thank you for visiting, Suzanne.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2017 6:58:00 PM

Cool one, AGnes!! Very visual the words are.

Agnes Krampe
Date: 3/31/2017 4:20:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea.

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/29/2017 2:23:00 PM

Perfect description Agnes, thank goodness it's deserted...

Agnes Krampe
Date: 3/31/2017 4:19:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 3/29/2017 11:54:00 AM

really good haiku here...nice alliteration, 'pale paper palace', that's exactly what they're like, i had one fall out of my shed roof just like that! i have to say, though, i hate wasps! a very strong entry for the contest, i like it a lot :)

Agnes Krampe
Date: 3/29/2017 12:43:00 PM

Thank you, Charlotte. They are amazing builders! I don't like wasps, but the paper wasps don't seem to be very aggressive.