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Wasp Nest

pale paper palace hundred hexagonal cells - deserted fortress 3/28/2017

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Date: 7/24/2018 10:51:00 PM
Well penned, Agnes.
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Date: 4/18/2017 5:51:00 AM
Hi Agnes, what a significant haiku. Its powerful in simplicity and a splendid topic. We have exactly those wasps here, the big red ones that become very defensive when the larvae hatch. One stung me in the eyelid and I wacked my eye so gard that I had a swolen eye that I kept open with a matchstick in order to drive to the chemist. It was bkack and swollen for 2 weeks. Ha ha
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Date: 4/18/2017 7:06:00 AM
Thank you for visiting, Jannie. That's quite a story! yes, they can be quite aggressive if disturbed.
Date: 4/15/2017 5:03:00 AM
This is brilliant! Some excellent well-placed alliteration to capture the scene perfectly. Regards, John.
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Date: 4/15/2017 7:58:00 AM
Thanks so much, John.
Date: 4/6/2017 10:04:00 AM
An excellent haiku, Agnes! Your sense of observation and imagination is amazing – pale paper palace. Wish I had written it. Thanks for stopping by. Best to you in your writing endeavors. / M
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Date: 4/15/2017 7:58:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words, Maurice.
Date: 3/31/2017 3:23:00 PM
A fascinating haiku, Agnes...I often come across these deserted nests and wonder what happened to all the activity and the inhabitants! It's like seeing a ghost town! ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 3/31/2017 4:21:00 PM
Thanks, Paul - I love your comparison to a ghost town, might have to steal that :)
Date: 3/31/2017 2:44:00 PM
Nature is so amazing. The tone of this Haiku conveys the emptiness of this 'fortress' that was once alive with stinging, flying insects. Good Luck in the contest.
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Date: 3/31/2017 4:20:00 PM
Thank you for visiting, Suzanne.
Date: 3/30/2017 6:58:00 PM
Cool one, AGnes!! Very visual the words are.
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Date: 3/31/2017 4:20:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea.
Date: 3/29/2017 2:23:00 PM
Perfect description Agnes, thank goodness it's deserted...
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Date: 3/31/2017 4:19:00 PM
Thank you, Charlie.
Date: 3/29/2017 11:54:00 AM
really good haiku here...nice alliteration, 'pale paper palace', that's exactly what they're like, i had one fall out of my shed roof just like that! i have to say, though, i hate wasps! a very strong entry for the contest, i like it a lot :)
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Date: 3/29/2017 12:43:00 PM
Thank you, Charlotte. They are amazing builders! I don't like wasps, but the paper wasps don't seem to be very aggressive.
Date: 3/29/2017 7:22:00 AM
Loved this Agnes. I seem to find those pale paper palaces everywhere and because of your poem, will never look at them the same again.
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Date: 3/29/2017 12:44:00 PM
Thanks, Chris. They are pretty cool structures.
Date: 3/29/2017 2:59:00 AM
Absolutely fabulous Agnes - we had a tiny bees nest in our compost bin it was an amazing structure:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/29/2017 12:43:00 PM
Thanks, Jan.
Date: 3/28/2017 9:31:00 PM
Love it! Seven :)
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Date: 3/29/2017 12:45:00 PM
Thank you, Maureen.
Date: 3/28/2017 8:55:00 PM
I find it so hard to do Haiku, When I read the title, I was curious how you would express this, all I can say is wonderful!
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Date: 3/29/2017 12:45:00 PM
Thank you, arthur. I found the nest in January and knew right away that I wanted to write about it.