Wasp Nest

pale paper palace
hundred hexagonal cells -
deserted fortress

3/28/2017

naturehaiku

♡Like0

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Line Gauthier

July 24, 2018 at 10:51 PM

Well penned, Agnes.

Jannie Breedt

April 18, 2017 at 5:51 AM

Hi Agnes, what a significant haiku. Its powerful in simplicity and a splendid topic. We have exactly those wasps here, the big red ones that become very defensive when the larvae hatch. One stung me in the eyelid and I wacked my eye so gard that I had a swolen eye that I kept open with a matchstick in order to drive to the chemist. It was bkack and swollen for 2 weeks. Ha ha

Agnes Krampe

April 18, 2017 at 7:06 AM

Thank you for visiting, Jannie. That's quite a story! yes, they can be quite aggressive if disturbed.

John Michaels

April 15, 2017 at 5:03 AM

This is brilliant! Some excellent well-placed alliteration to capture the scene perfectly. Regards, John.

Agnes Krampe

April 15, 2017 at 7:58 AM

Thanks so much, John.

Maurice Rigoler

April 6, 2017 at 10:04 AM

An excellent haiku, Agnes! Your sense of observation and imagination is amazing – pale paper palace. Wish I had written it. Thanks for stopping by. Best to you in your writing endeavors. / M

Agnes Krampe

April 15, 2017 at 7:58 AM

Thank you for your kind words, Maurice.

Paul Callus

March 31, 2017 at 3:23 PM

A fascinating haiku, Agnes...I often come across these deserted nests and wonder what happened to all the activity and the inhabitants! It's like seeing a ghost town! ~ Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe

March 31, 2017 at 4:21 PM

Thanks, Paul - I love your comparison to a ghost town, might have to steal that :)

Suzanne Delaney

March 31, 2017 at 2:44 PM

Nature is so amazing. The tone of this Haiku conveys the emptiness of this 'fortress' that was once alive with stinging, flying insects. Good Luck in the contest.

Agnes Krampe

March 31, 2017 at 4:20 PM

Thank you for visiting, Suzanne.

Andrea Dietrich

March 30, 2017 at 6:58 PM

Cool one, AGnes!! Very visual the words are.

Agnes Krampe

March 31, 2017 at 4:20 PM

Thanks, Andrea.

Charlie Smith

March 29, 2017 at 2:23 PM

Perfect description Agnes, thank goodness it's deserted...

Agnes Krampe

March 31, 2017 at 4:19 PM

Thank you, Charlie.

Charlotte Puddifoot

March 29, 2017 at 11:54 AM

really good haiku here...nice alliteration, 'pale paper palace', that's exactly what they're like, i had one fall out of my shed roof just like that! i have to say, though, i hate wasps! a very strong entry for the contest, i like it a lot :)

Agnes Krampe

March 29, 2017 at 12:43 PM

Thank you, Charlotte. They are amazing builders! I don't like wasps, but the paper wasps don't seem to be very aggressive.