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Washed Up Now

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What once was such a beloved auto, shiny and new is now A rusty sad shell of her dazzling days gone by as she Stands so pitifully on tall grasses sprouting inside and out. Her horn hushed permanently, almost unrecognizable with Eyes completely blinded by vandals. She feels abandoned and Desperate to recapture what was once such a gay life, with United family outings...happy memories of attending Picnics near the sunny sea shore or park, and so much more... Now sun baked, she sizzles in the junk yard graveyard. Her Only comfort, being surrounded by others looking worse off as she Waits...willing to give parts of herself to help others in need. 6-15-16 Rusted and Busted Sponsor Casarah Nance N/A

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Lynn Marie

Date: 8/14/2016 2:44:00 PM

Wonderfully imaginative, the "life memories" of this beloved "jalopy"are bittersweet, touching and pure pleasure to read. I love the creativity of your mind, my friend :-) blessings, lynn p.s. I am still in awe of "The Grunions"...This lovely Acrostic will accompany it as a favourite :-)

CayCay Jennings

Date: 7/1/2016 9:47:00 PM

You did a fine job, Connie - it was touching, emotional and entertaining. CayCay (I have yet to win the poems that placed)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/30/2016 9:50:00 PM

can't believe if this was not on the list, connie. well, I am off to Oregon to see my son early morning. Trying to be caught up, but one is NEVER caught up here and I dread to know that comments will probably scroll off the comment list before I can see them all unless i can do soup at my son's house. Good bye sweetie until later!

Jesse Day

Date: 6/20/2016 10:08:00 AM

Excellent in personifying the car and in stating the significant role it played throughout its "life". Also, I found thoughts of how we deal with our own mortality hanging in your words. Nicely written! - Jesse

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/2/2016 2:59:00 AM

Thank you Jesse. I have always kind of felt of my car as an extension of myself. I keep it clean and have never let my grandchildren eat or drink anything but water in my car. It is just a humble VW Beetle, but it is in good shape, even after 11 years. I appreciate your thoughtful comment. ; )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/17/2016 6:56:00 AM

I really like what you did here, Connie. first describing the car with the first word of the acrostic, then giving a few of her memories and at the end, giving her future. So nicely done.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/17/2016 7:11:00 PM

Yeah..the alpha and omega of a car's life. Thanks Andrea for your astute observations. It is much appreciated. ; )

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/17/2016 1:15:00 AM

Nice write on those old cars:) Love the thought that she is "willing to give parts of herself to help others in need.":)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/17/2016 7:12:00 PM

Thank you Jo...it is all she has left to offer. ; )

Skat A

Date: 6/16/2016 11:19:00 PM

I like how you did your entry... Connie... Skat

Jan Allison

Date: 6/16/2016 3:16:00 PM

Great take on the theme Connie .. so sad to see these old cars but she still has her uses for spare parts:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/16/2016 3:20:00 PM

Hi Jan, my reply to Nette hopped up to your space. Thanks a lot. Connie ; )

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/16/2016 3:18:00 PM

Thank you Nette. We need junkyards for the classic cars that need parts when things break. It is sad to see what Mother Nature's elements do to the discarded vehicles tho'. ; )

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/16/2016 2:53:00 PM

connie, love how this old car can still be of good use for others...and your visual language, poetic mood are indelibly marked within your phrases!.. huggs

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/16/2016 3:20:00 PM

Thank you Nette. We need junkyards for the classic cars that need parts when things break. It is sad to see what Mother Nature's elements do to the discarded vehicles tho'. ; )

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/16/2016 9:57:00 AM

Hi, Connie, I love how your imagery brings the poor 'washed up' auto to life as you brilliantly describe its sad demise. A great Acrostic and best wishes for the contest. 7 Hugs, Sandra

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/16/2016 3:29:00 PM

I will need the luck Sandra with the amount of N/A's I have been receiving. I tend to write shorter poems and the longer poems are usually preferred I have found. Thanks a lot for your encouraging words. ; )

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/16/2016 6:58:00 AM

- Last week I saw one that had "risen from death" ... new renovated by this type of cars - Really gorgeous cars .... wooow, many memories behind the wheel - A great poem to the contest, good luck Connie - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 6/16/2016 3:22:00 PM

Thank you very much Anne-Lise. The restored vehicles help keep our history alive for future generations. ; )