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Onomatopoeia Contest by Emile Pinet ~ 9/18/24

Waking on a Rainy Morning

I was not awakened by the drip dripping of a faucet tap
as I lay abed, stifling a yawn trying to return to sleep.
It was the soft ping pinging sound of rain drops, rap rap,
redundant chirps like a newly hatched chick's peep peep.

I heard the distant crash and boom in peals of thunder
trying to roar louder than the tick tock of the alarm clock.
I rolled over, groaning need of sleep, feeling torn asunder.
That's when I heard the unmistakable click of the door lock.

There was the swoosh from a pair of little, socked feet,
pitter pattering tiny toes on hardwood floors that creaked.
A warm breath murmured "Mommy," in a voice so sweet.
Drizzle splish splashed the windowpane, leaving it streaked.

My sleepy child snuggled in my arms, both of us drifting in dreams
when the shrill ring ring of my cell phone started to chime.
The vibrating mmm mmm refused my dance with moonbeams.
Kitty sashayed into the room, "Meow meow. It's feeding time."

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Emile Pinet October 1, 2024 at 8:33 AM Congratulations Lin! Your Onomatopoeia poem "Waking on a Rainy Morning" has earned you a distinguished placement in my poetry contest. I was strict, but your poem earned you a spot on the winner’s list. Very well done, my friend. Lin Lane October 1, 2024 at 9:25 AM Many thanks for your consideration, Emile. It's always an honor to be on your list.

Daniel Henry Rodgers September 19, 2024 at 7:22 AM Dear Lin, I loved the words in your, crash and boom and swoosh and splish splash and and and... Wonderful read for me this morning and I hope that you do well in the contest. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel Lin Lane September 20, 2024 at 2:07 AM Thank you from each swoosh and boom and all the others, Daniel.

John Lawless September 18, 2024 at 1:38 PM KABOOM.....you got this one Lin. Very nicely done. I knew sleep was a long shot when the "little socked feet" were followed by the "meow meow" moment. Lin Lane September 18, 2024 at 5:39 PM That's quite an opening for a comment, John. Thanks for your thoughts on this one.

Tom Cunningham September 18, 2024 at 11:28 AM You rose well to the challenge Lin, you've written more than ten Onomatopoeia words needed, brilliant writing. Good luck in the contest. Tom Lin Lane September 18, 2024 at 12:01 PM sometimes, I need to know when to put my pen down or walk away from the keyboard, but this was not one of those times. I didn't feel it was complete until I had been fully awakened. lol fiction, of course. Thanks, Tom.