waken

then the sun winked at the night's lazy clouds and they blushed...with a pinkish sigh not knowing whether or not to warn the sailors ~ of a distant storm...

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/19/2025 2:30:00 PM

I had to read this a few times. Romantic in both a sensuous way but also in the sea’s adventure. Also makes me think of the sweetheart waiting back home and the peril the seaman is clueless about. Just in a few lines, the setting, the plot, and it thickens, and what will be the outcome? A fave

Craig Cornish
Date: 1/19/2025 3:23:00 PM

Very kind Kim - thank you!

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/19/2025 10:28:00 AM

Dear Craig, wonderful reference to the old maritime saying with beautiful use of personification and imagery. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Craig Cornish
Date: 1/19/2025 10:44:00 AM

Thanks so much Susan!