Waiting To Be Free

Waiting to be free


I am dying, but not like anybody who died.
I am living, but in the rainbow, I do reside. 
How much longer will I go until secrets unveil?
My mind cannot comprehend, but my heart will decide.
My problems are too simple, my remedy complex;
Love is my medicine, which I have identified.
Destination is unknown; the journey is too short,
My vehicle is broken, and our driver is mystified. 
My body is a cage; my soul is shackled inside. 
Speak not of troubles; my pain will be justified.
The door is half open; I can see the ray of love, 
My heart will take over until we’re all unified.
Tomorrow, I will fly with swallows; they know the path.
Who can you trust “Haloo”? There is no one to confide.


1/25/16 Haloo



I dedicate this poem to Daniel Turner, for all his love and friendship.
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Mishra Avatar
April 24, 2018 at 2:25 AM
awesome writing! "My body is a cage, my soul is shackled inside. Speak not of troubles, my pain will be justified." what a expressive line.
Salehi Avatar
April 24, 2018 at 1:29 PM
Thank you my friend..
Kendrick Avatar
July 21, 2017 at 4:50 PM
Very expressive work..It would be interesting to fly with the swallows..I enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Salehi Avatar
August 11, 2017 at 7:47 PM
Thanks Sara..
Duncan Avatar
June 18, 2017 at 4:18 AM
This is a very nice dedication to Daniel. It seems to be number one on your best list :)
Salehi Avatar
June 18, 2017 at 10:45 AM
Thank you Debbie... Happy father's day.
Hagy Avatar
August 2, 2016 at 7:20 PM
These physical bodies are just a "cage"...how wonderful the spirit will always be set free...wonderful dedication to your friend:)
Salehi Avatar
August 2, 2016 at 8:31 PM
Thanks
Bohto Avatar
July 8, 2016 at 3:02 PM
Im having a hard time understanding this style of writing. I'll have to explore this sometime. Is it unified or complex??? Help me. I'm vexed.
Salehi Avatar
July 8, 2016 at 9:08 PM
Hi, Holly This is a good example of ghazal (shoter version of quasida)! I have few other examples with refrain and without. It is rather complex. Poetry soup has an explanation and example about this form. You can always email me if you need more info....Pashang
Dietrich Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 12:35 AM
It was so NEAT to read your BEST poem at Soup! I can see why. It's just wonderful. And yes, where is that Daniel Turner??
Salehi Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 6:16 PM
Thank you my dear........
Hicks Avatar
March 19, 2016 at 2:40 PM
So this is the refrain-less ghazal then. I must say it's a marvelous piece, with lots to ponder. "My vehicle is broken, the driver is mystified" ... Really liked this line here, as well as your swallow metaphor at the end. A good tribute. I forget who is Haloo again? I remember someone asking that but I forget the answer.
Salehi Avatar
March 19, 2016 at 6:48 PM
Hi Tim Thank you very much for kind words. Yes, this is refrain less! The soup explain Ghazal, but you have to be able to read Arabic. The soup says " A ghazal may or may not have a maqta (refrain) but if it does, it has to be the last sher of the ghazal" (Sher means lines in a poem, couplets). Regarding Haloo, it means gullible, naive! another story! I am The one!...
Daniel Avatar
March 9, 2016 at 8:50 AM
This poem is a great tribute to a wonderful poet:)
Salehi Avatar
March 9, 2016 at 9:24 AM
Yes, not to a poet, to a great human being, great man, great friend....
Callus Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 6:33 AM
What a creative way to pay tribute to a worthy fellow poet, Pashang! I hope one day I'll be following your swallows, too....with trust! ~ regards // paul
Salehi Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:11 AM
Thanks Paul... Always
Kroll Avatar
March 5, 2016 at 8:28 PM
Thx for your remark on Coolness. Love your poem. I can identify with its tone. Unfortunately, I don't know Daniel Turner.
Salehi Avatar
March 5, 2016 at 11:47 PM
Thanks Kathleen... DT is a good man with a big heart and tremendous talent... look for his poems.
Johnson Avatar
March 3, 2016 at 9:52 PM
I love your poem
Salehi Avatar
March 3, 2016 at 9:59 PM
Thanks Don...
Salehi Avatar
March 3, 2016 at 9:58 PM
Thanks Don...
Gentry Avatar
March 2, 2016 at 4:43 PM
An awesome tribute to an awesome man! Especially like 'My mind cannot comprehend but my heart will decide." Enjoyed reading.
Salehi Avatar
March 3, 2016 at 11:12 AM
Thank you Susan.. Thank you for conveying your love... Love is my medicine as well as his... Pashang
Smith Avatar
March 1, 2016 at 12:32 PM
A fabulous tribute to a wonderful human being...
Salehi Avatar
March 1, 2016 at 8:18 PM
Indeed! Thank you Tim.
Turner Avatar
March 1, 2016 at 11:35 AM
My friend, my heart is smiling and I am weeping tears of joy. You have touched this old man deeply. Love is the medicine that will heal us all. God bless you my friend. It is a beautiful day inside my heart. Peace to you and your lovely wife:)
Salehi Avatar
March 1, 2016 at 8:18 PM
Love is truly the medicine. I had to do something to express my appreciation. As you said, the voice of many, sings a louder sound. God bless you too my friend.
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