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Waiting to be free

             Waiting to be free

I am dying, but not like anybody who died.
     I am living, but in the rainbow, I do reside. 
How much longer will I go until secrets unveil?
     My mind cannot comprehend but my heart will decide.
My problems are too simple, my remedy complex;
     Love is my medicine, which I have identified.
Destination is unknown; the journey is too short,
     My vehicle is broken, our driver is mystified. 
My body is a cage, my soul is shackled inside. 
     Speak not of troubles, my pain will be justified.
The door is half open; I can see the ray of love, 
     My heart will take over until we’re all unified.
Tomorrow, I will fly with swallows, they know the path.
     Who can you trust “Haloo”? There is no one to confide.

March 1st, 2016   Haloo


I dedicate this poem to Daniel Turner, for all his love and friendship. 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 4/24/2018 2:25:00 AM
awesome writing! "My body is a cage, my soul is shackled inside. Speak not of troubles, my pain will be justified." what a expressive line.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 4/24/2018 1:29:00 PM
Thank you my friend..
Date: 7/21/2017 4:50:00 PM
Very expressive work..It would be interesting to fly with the swallows..I enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/11/2017 7:47:00 PM
Thanks Sara..
Date: 6/18/2017 4:18:00 AM
This is a very nice dedication to Daniel. It seems to be number one on your best list :)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 6/18/2017 10:45:00 AM
Thank you Debbie... Happy father's day.
Date: 8/2/2016 7:20:00 PM
These physical bodies are just a "cage"...how wonderful the spirit will always be set free...wonderful dedication to your friend:)
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Date: 8/2/2016 8:31:00 PM
Thanks
Date: 7/8/2016 3:02:00 PM
Im having a hard time understanding this style of writing. I'll have to explore this sometime. Is it unified or complex??? Help me. I'm vexed.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/8/2016 9:08:00 PM
Hi, Holly This is a good example of ghazal (shoter version of quasida)! I have few other examples with refrain and without. It is rather complex. Poetry soup has an explanation and example about this form. You can always email me if you need more info....Pashang
Date: 6/9/2016 12:35:00 AM
It was so NEAT to read your BEST poem at Soup! I can see why. It's just wonderful. And yes, where is that Daniel Turner??
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 6/9/2016 6:16:00 PM
Thank you my dear........
Date: 3/19/2016 2:40:00 PM
So this is the refrain-less ghazal then. I must say it's a marvelous piece, with lots to ponder. "My vehicle is broken, the driver is mystified" ... Really liked this line here, as well as your swallow metaphor at the end. A good tribute. I forget who is Haloo again? I remember someone asking that but I forget the answer.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/19/2016 6:48:00 PM
Hi Tim Thank you very much for kind words. Yes, this is refrain less! The soup explain Ghazal, but you have to be able to read Arabic. The soup says " A ghazal may or may not have a maqta (refrain) but if it does, it has to be the last sher of the ghazal" (Sher means lines in a poem, couplets). Regarding Haloo, it means gullible, naive! another story! I am The one!...
Date: 3/9/2016 8:50:00 AM
This poem is a great tribute to a wonderful poet:)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/9/2016 9:24:00 AM
Yes, not to a poet, to a great human being, great man, great friend....
Date: 3/6/2016 6:33:00 AM
What a creative way to pay tribute to a worthy fellow poet, Pashang! I hope one day I'll be following your swallows, too....with trust! ~ regards // paul
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/6/2016 10:11:00 AM
Thanks Paul... Always
Date: 3/5/2016 8:28:00 PM
Thx for your remark on Coolness. Love your poem. I can identify with its tone. Unfortunately, I don't know Daniel Turner.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/5/2016 11:47:00 PM
Thanks Kathleen... DT is a good man with a big heart and tremendous talent... look for his poems.
Date: 3/3/2016 9:52:00 PM
I love your poem
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/3/2016 9:59:00 PM
Thanks Don...
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/3/2016 9:58:00 PM
Thanks Don...
Date: 3/3/2016 7:06:00 AM
A wonderful tribute to a great poet, Pashang. T.J
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/3/2016 11:13:00 AM
Indeed... Thank you
Date: 3/2/2016 4:43:00 PM
An awesome tribute to an awesome man! Especially like 'My mind cannot comprehend but my heart will decide." Enjoyed reading.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/3/2016 11:12:00 AM
Thank you Susan.. Thank you for conveying your love... Love is my medicine as well as his... Pashang
Date: 3/1/2016 12:32:00 PM
A fabulous tribute to a wonderful human being...
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/1/2016 8:18:00 PM
Indeed! Thank you Tim.
Date: 3/1/2016 11:35:00 AM
My friend, my heart is smiling and I am weeping tears of joy. You have touched this old man deeply. Love is the medicine that will heal us all. God bless you my friend. It is a beautiful day inside my heart. Peace to you and your lovely wife:)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/1/2016 8:18:00 PM
Love is truly the medicine. I had to do something to express my appreciation. As you said, the voice of many, sings a louder sound. God bless you too my friend.