Waiting For the Rain

After the door shuts and the footsteps die,
I rehearse the words I wanted to say.
I tumble them around and around in my mind.
Juggle them. Rewrite them to perfection.
But I won't see you again.

Perhaps it is better this way.

Those nights we spent entwined in moonlit silk,
our hearts beating wildly, kisses so soft
a mere feather could have tasted my lips,
how could such passion be sustained?
Surely we would have burnt out
like two candles beckoned by one flame.

And those days by the beach,
when you playfully teased the ocean,
your skirt lifted high,
the waves bathing your thighs in sea foam,
like the bubbles from your nightly baths.
I still want to lick the saltiness away,
but we've both been battered and beaten
against the shore to the point of loneliness.

We used to be like rain drops,
splashing into the same pool,
spreading ourselves out to the world.
We explored the City in all it's splendor,
gathering other rain drops as we went along.
We were fluid and irresistible - two crazy gals.
But attractions cannot last during droughts.

Your highs became lows, crashes so hard,
the forceful blows struck even me.
I would have shared your pain,
sat in vigil until the rain began again.
I watched your beauty fade into a grey mass,
thunder clouds so fierce I was sure to get wet.
But you couldn't wait it out,
your tears dried upon your ashen face.
I didn't want us to end like this,
our love pounded into the ground.

As the door shuts and the footsteps die,
rain beats against the window panes,
begging to be let in.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 7/10/2013 8:55:00 AM
Emotionally deep piece full of great memories which are written in great harmony. You are welcome to PS Lori.
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Date: 7/9/2013 12:33:00 PM
Hi Lori, your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan and "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 7/9/2013 12:37:00 AM
Lori, graceful poem..-Dropping in with a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I’m here to invite you on over to my contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -If you ever need or seek feedback on a certain poem, click on my name any time you like. I’m looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@"
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Date: 7/8/2013 9:04:00 AM
Amazing piece!! A warm welcome to the soup!!! :D - Edward
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Date: 7/8/2013 4:34:00 AM
- Hello Lori - Welcome to P-Soup. - Thanks for your first poem, hope there will be many more in the future. - Have fun with poetry. - Good luck! - Greetings from Norway / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/6/2013 6:02:00 PM
Solace and peace are found in your writing... for both you... and your reader. I believe your talent will become increasingly appreciated as you post more. You are off to a fine start... Jake
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Lori Carlson
Date: 7/6/2013 8:46:00 PM
Thank you, Jake.. I appreciate your kind words and encouragement.
Date: 7/6/2013 2:20:00 PM
This poem is depicts a great journey of love and friendship, and I believe you did it wonderfully through imagery. It was a captivating read with both joy and sadness. Thank you for the share, it was a pleasurable read. :)
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Lori Carlson
Date: 7/6/2013 8:47:00 PM
Thank you, Brittany. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this piece. Your words are inspiring to me.
Date: 7/6/2013 1:43:00 PM
I have no right to ask... but, I wonder, would you consider reviewing a piece of mine entitled 'Nightscapes?' It is a tribute to T.S. Eliot, and I would like to hear your opinion. Thank you.
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Lori Carlson
Date: 7/6/2013 8:48:00 PM
I would be honored to read your poem.. Thank you for asking me.
Date: 7/6/2013 1:38:00 PM
I have found a new heroine!!! Such eloquent expressions, powerful emotions, engaging imagery... that's it! you have the ability to ENGAGE... bringing this reader all the way through the happiness and good times to the heartache and the tears. Congratulations Lori, this is a MASTERPIECE! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 7/6/2013 8:48:00 PM
*smiles* thanks Keith, you have me blushing at such praise, but I definitely appreciate it.
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