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He would enter the corral in the thick fog of mist, up long before daylight would christen the air The skies would be coral, and the sun glazed the crest Dust clung to the heels of his old leather boots, and gathered in shrouds around the hoofs of the mare. Billowing were clouds, and a whirlwind of grief that followed the storms of long hours awake Endless were nights without the refuge of sleep while he waited for sun to arrive and relieve Caressing the flank of her sleek narrow, frame, his favorite mare, Queenie, was the color of dawn He would gather her reins, for a moment of calm then, bury his face in her rusty brown mane He'd watch as the light slipped over the hills, smoothing the shadows, that haunted his world Without ever knowing the worries we found as we saw those same shadows, splay rapidly down, drowning his eyes, with dark circles and frowns Grief and the love of his horses, would ride, together, off center....wherever, to hide, and soften the hours, that waited for night For the house was a shell, and the bedroom, upstairs, became the forbidden, without her to share The nights, ever long, were just waiting to tear open the wounds that couldn't be shared Up at the sunrise, and out until starlight Where shadows grew stronger, and nights even longer Burning the daylight, until light was in ashes, then thrashing the midnight, with the darkness of mourning, wading through dust-clouds, to see morning's light Waiting for something to make it alright ____________________________________________________ 4/28/15 Dedicated to my Dad

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Date: 7/19/2016 9:05:00 PM
Carrie, your descriptive words bring your poem to life! Congrats on your 1st place win! Blessings!
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Date: 7/17/2016 12:17:00 PM
Congrats on your beautiful win with beautiful poem my lovely smiling friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 7/16/2016 3:22:00 PM
Filling the emptiness by getting engrossed in work, cramming every moment so as to leave no space for grief and loneliness to take over...but the night haunt the mind... Burying his face in the mare's rusty brown mane conveys so much meaning and emotion! ~ Congratulations, Carrie, on placing first. Regards // paul
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Date: 7/16/2016 2:02:00 PM
Carrie, superbly written...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest lady :)-luloo
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Date: 12/17/2015 2:24:00 PM
CARRIE, NICE WIN..... SKAT
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Date: 12/15/2015 9:58:00 PM
Carrie ;) Congratulations on your HM. Stop by my latest blog "You're Still Out There" if you'd like. Enjoy the Holidays and Thank you for supporting my contest. Love LINDA
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Date: 7/10/2015 9:19:00 PM
An excellent write, Carrie! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
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Date: 7/7/2015 2:59:00 PM
sweet win
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Date: 7/7/2015 2:02:00 PM
Carrie, Congrats on your win. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 7/7/2015 7:49:00 AM
What a wonderful piece, the best I have read so far. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 7/7/2015 3:38:00 AM
Wonderful pen Carrie!Big congrats!
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Date: 4/30/2015 5:36:00 AM
hi carrie, your poems just make me want to experience things i never have and maybe never will like riding horses and touching snow, thanks for bringing out that longing.
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Date: 4/29/2015 8:07:00 PM
Carrie, beautifully penned narrative, I was enthralled with every word, best of luck with this great write, 7, and thanks for visiting my poem, turn it off
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Date: 4/29/2015 10:26:00 AM
Carrie, a heartfelt emotional poem,a 7 and good luck in the contest. Blessings eve
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Date: 4/28/2015 10:46:00 PM
Wow! Impressive.
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Date: 4/28/2015 7:00:00 PM
Carrie, Reading your work is like a page turner on a book you can't put down. Excellent job!!
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