Wabi-sabi

“Your daughter stares,” 
       my mother whispered;
as she lay naked on the bed. 

       A smile of pleasure crossed her face
        while the nurse
  gently bathed her frail body
with a soft, warm sponge.

      “Don’t you turn away,”
  sensing my discomfort.

I look
     at the scars
of birth, of falls from trees  
        of old repairs, 
  and new.

“She is young,” I say
     “Scared”

“Poppycock; see, she’s smiling,”
my mother whispered.
 
   “She looks in a mirror.”
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Sambourne Avatar
January 6, 2024 at 7:49 PM
I truly love the sparse, impactful power of this Wabi-Sabi. It has a narrative base that pulls the reader into the imperfect perfection of a girl hospitalized, scarred yet enduring. Congratulations! Brian
Miller Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 5:41 AM
Thank you so very much Brian
One Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 1:55 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Miller Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 5:41 AM
Thank you so much
Puddifoot Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 7:25 AM
what an original, thoughtful take on the contest theme - i enjoyed reading it - congrats on your win!
Miller Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 9:33 AM
Thank you Charlotte
Empress Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 2:43 AM
This is so touching and very well written for this theme. I felt the depth of your poignant and moving poem. Especially as you mentioned about scars from falls etc shows experiences of life… imperfect perfection.. wabi sabi. Well depicted. Congratulations on your win
Miller Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 9:33 AM
Thank you so very much I always appreciate your comments
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