Vows

I SEE THE WAY I FEEL INSIDE, LOCKED AWAY BEHIND ALL MY LIES. I HEAR THE WORDS BEHIND MY BACK, TRUTHFULLY IT'S ACOUSTICALLY SAD. WHEN THE CHORDS ARE PLAYED, THERE'S A MELODIC HAUNTING IN MY MIND! LOST INSIDE; THE ENDEAVOR IS BLIND. STAR-GAZING BRINGS THE TUNES TO A HIGH, PEOPLE WATCHING TAKES ME TO A LOW. BOXED IN THE WAY I FEEL; MY PANIC BECOMES MANIC, I JUST NEED A WAY TO DEAL. STRAWBERRY GASHES IN PEACH-COLORED FIELDS, HELPS TO DEFINE HOW IT IS AND WHAT I TRULY FEEL. FORGIVENESS SOUNDS GOUND, BUT I KNOW I WON'T FORGET. JUST LIKE A GREAT POEM OR SONNET THESE SCARS ARE MY COMMITTMENT. SO AS I SHALL FADE TO NOTHINGNESS NOW; I GIVE YOU THESE WORDS TO CHERISH - DEATH BECOMES MY WEDDING VOW.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/10/2016 11:17:00 PM

Lisa, hope you are doing better these days. I know we don't know each other, but if you ever want a poetic friend or someone to chill with on this site... Just look me up. Maybe one day in the future we can write a collaboration. Good night....Linda

Lisa Allen
Date: 3/10/2016 11:24:00 PM

Thanks. I am doing a lot better, I still battle depression but I have stopped cutting and having a job helps a lot as well as having my family close to me. I'm always up for having new friends.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/10/2016 10:48:00 PM

Wow, death becomes my wedding vows. I think that sums it, in a twisted awesome way of course. If you were to tone the poem down a bit... I'd like to fav the poem. Because I love what you said about the strawberry ---- field... I think it's a unique line... Luv...Linda

Lisa Allen
Date: 3/10/2016 10:55:00 PM

Yea, I was at a really low point in my life when I had written this poem. I was listening to Strawberry gashes by Jack Off Jill when I got the urge to write and this came out of that. Not sure if I could tone it down and still give off what I felt at the time especially as a recovering cutter, this was one of the few that actually helped me understand the difficulties I was going through then.