Void Within Fills

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Void within fills with magnetism Dormant fears yet hinder Desire bubbles, ego spawned chasm Touch not burning cinder The road is long; enjoy! Devoid of ego ploy Light glows within, ahoy! Bliss overspills Void within fills 18-October-2021 Quietus

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 10/18/2021 10:22:00 AM

Like the way you put syllable specs aside when poetic content is the focus. enchantment would be a good synonym for magnetism but less powerful; and vent would rhyme but doesn't have the color of the word chasm. i like the quietus form and must try it sometime. Thanks for the introduction to it.

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 10/18/2021 7:38:00 PM

Sure! Give it a try; there as contest on! Syllables are tricky, different counters give varying results, the above adheres to PS counter though. I’m not a purist for exact rhymes, what’s the point if the message is lost in the process? ~ Magnetism has no substitute, being the closest thing I know of, to describe the feeling of divine electricity pulsating within!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/18/2021 8:57:00 AM

Happy those who can be filled with bliss.

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 10/18/2021 7:41:00 PM

If we empty ourselves first, only then do we create room within, for bliss to fill in