Vitamin Sea

I went to the beach For my vitamin sea To drink in the zing Of an orange setting sun As it spritzed liquid gold Onto zesty shimmering sand © Brenda V northeast 6th January 2012

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Robert Pettit

Date: 1/11/2012 3:05:00 AM

People can get their vitamin D from basking in the sunshine. Vitamin C (ascorbic acid) is water soluble and is usually obtained by consuming citrus fruits and green leafy vegetables. Nevertheless, your poem is impressively descriptive.

Brenda Victoria Northeast
Date: 1/11/2012 5:12:00 AM

Thank you Robert for your kind comments, it was the overall effect of the orange sunset that conjured the Vit C/SEA play on words and images- thank you for your input, blessings, Brenda : )

Maureen Lefanue

Date: 1/10/2012 4:29:00 AM

Dear Brenda, It's people like you who enable me to say "Why I Love truly PoetrySoup". You are so kind. God bless, Maureen :)

Brenda Victoria Northeast
Date: 1/11/2012 5:07:00 AM

Thank you Maureen, Love and blessings, Brenda

Maureen Lefanue

Date: 1/9/2012 9:22:00 PM

Thank you Brenda for your kind comments. I messed up the poem by cutting it down to 15 lines, but glad you still were able to enjoy it! Love, M :)

Brenda Victoria Northeast
Date: 1/11/2012 5:06:00 AM

Sacrifice in length is hazardous sometimes to a poem, but your poem certainly read well so need not fear Maureen your inspiring message was heart felt. Love, Brenda : )

Debra Squyres

Date: 1/9/2012 6:46:00 PM

Very creative write...much enjoyed. Passing an empty glass, fill-er-up !!!

Brenda Victoria Northeast
Date: 1/9/2012 7:14:00 PM

Cheers Debra, Brenda : )