View From the Top of the Trail

It’s an unknown journey, but I see a trail
heading to the light of tomorrow
There will often be times I'll be afraid, to go
I may stumble a bit, with an eager heart
And may tremble climbing cliffs of old sorrows

There are deep, black chasms I will not forget,
where slopes slick, with pitfalls, are waiting to trip 
But I've gone too far, and I can't turn around,
Just as the sun can't turn its back on the day 

The trees speak in tongues, so foreign to my ears
using parched, old voices, and tears from the sky
Scraps of brittle leaves litter, with dust all around
Mixed with words left unsaid, that I've left behind

There’s a sharp mist of hope, at the bend of the river
yet,sun on my face seems to lend, 
the slope of the rain, but the warmth of the sun
      with an open blue sky at the end


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Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Onclaud Avatar
October 12, 2014 at 2:29 PM
a deluge of intricate and breathtaking metaphors from your poetic climb, carrie... a round of big cheers on your high win..
Song Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 9:27 PM
What a great view at the top of the trail...how many amazing metaphors I found along your journey! Great winning write!
Guzzi Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 4:08 PM
Ah pleasant free verse with to settle its unrhymic stance ends in simple rhyme (I too find myself doing this often ;) Congrad's on your win, Light & Love
Allison Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 11:20 AM
dropping back with my congratulations:-) hugs Jan xxx
Meier-Hans Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 9:15 AM
And with the blue sky we find calm. Congratulations on your win Carrie.
Yvonne Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 9:05 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win.
A. Sharma Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 7:27 AM
Wonderful journey Carrie! Third stanza my fav, congrats on big win!
Zerbst Avatar
August 26, 2014 at 7:41 PM
This is great, especially about the trees. Luck to ya.
Gibson Avatar
August 21, 2014 at 5:15 PM
Congratulations, Carrie...I really thought this would be the top one.
Callus Avatar
August 21, 2014 at 10:25 AM
Excellent write...metaphorically speaking! Beautiful journey through life, with all its ups and downs. Congrats on a lovely and merited win, Carrie. // paul
Callus Avatar
October 11, 2014 at 8:00 AM
...and back for a second read and with merited congratulations on your win in Anthony's contest! // paul
Chutani Avatar
August 21, 2014 at 8:19 AM
great win, Carrie on a meaningful poem. Mohan
Allison Avatar
August 21, 2014 at 7:25 AM
wonderful metaphors and i love the final lines - a great win:-) Hugs jan xx
Mehta Avatar
August 21, 2014 at 5:48 AM
Interesting poem to be pondered over, Carrie. congrats
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 16, 2014 at 7:53 PM
I adore poems with dark and light and this one is special Carrie. I especially love your last stanza with its clear imagery to ponder. Blessings, Connie
Gibson Avatar
August 16, 2014 at 5:35 PM
May tremble climbing cliffs of old sorrows and the third verse...such beautiful writing, Carrie. You are one of my favs.
Horne Avatar
August 16, 2014 at 5:15 PM
love this very clever write, Carrie - and a wonderful upbeat end : )
K. Avatar
August 16, 2014 at 11:41 AM
You give much hope here, Carrie, and as always with your own brand of imagery that is both beautiful and vivid at the same time. I especially liked your 4th stanza here, it's so rich for me. Thank you for passing by my poem with such inspiring words and haha also for bearing with my wordiness!
A. Sharma Avatar
August 16, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful write Carrie ,, this wanderlust never should end,, else we stagnate,, n monotony is as gud as an end! gl in contest!
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