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My heart is going away from me How do i do away with me The inside war is underway The white forces still making the day

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Judy Ball

Date: 8/31/2021 3:53:00 AM

Look to The Light my friend. Find courage, strength and wisdom in the Words of Christ. God Bless, JB

David Smith

Date: 2/4/2020 12:13:00 AM

Look forward to day you are up to posting again. Best regards in NZ

Muhammad Imtiaz
Date: 2/4/2020 12:27:00 AM

Thanks David, Actually i have been too much busy with my job , i cannot post new stuff. Hopefully i will do . thanks for visiting my page

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/14/2018 12:28:00 PM

Hello Muhammad,it sounds to as I read this verse,that you a Have a nice day my friend.re having a battle with yourself. Yes that is what I understand as I read this poem.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/3/2018 9:20:00 AM

I hope you discover your light! Thanks for your visit.

Muhammad Imtiaz
Date: 9/21/2018 7:39:00 AM

Your are always welcome my friend

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/11/2018 4:40:00 AM

Nice word play, poetic feelings and how u express in brief. Thumbs up. Pleez do comment on my newest poem too.

L. J. Carber

Date: 6/22/2018 11:23:00 AM

That war wages within every human heart, Muhammad-- it is human nature that we must go either towards the light (the 'white forces') or towards darkness. (Would like to see you expand on this into a longer poem).

Muhammad Imtiaz
Date: 6/30/2023 10:21:00 PM

you reached to the point where it ought to be. Thanks for fair and just explanation. BR

Muhammad Imtiaz
Date: 6/24/2018 2:27:00 AM

Thanks L.J. Carber. I will surely do it when i got time.

Silent One

Date: 6/17/2018 8:14:00 AM

Great lines Muhammad..