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Vanessa

Vanessa Long after sleep has captured your body And dreams, like butterflies, float above your head I sneak into your bedroom, rest my head on your pillow To inhale the sweet fragrance The aroma that is YOU! You smell of fall wind which tangles your braids. Tangy orange and lime still lingers on your breath. The nape of your neck- I think "new-born puppies" And your hands are vanilla like your favorite soap. That scent- so complex, so unique yet so yours captivates my senses and encodes in my brain. You talk in your sleep and all of a sudden I get a rare glimpse Inside one of your dreams.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 5/28/2014 6:23:00 AM
Interesting and creative. Congrats on your poem being featured this week,
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Date: 5/22/2014 2:53:00 PM
Ewelina now this is stunning, the imagery here is wonderful, if I were to change anything I would say your fist two stanzas are perfect but the next three lines should be re-formatted to make them the same length and then combined with the last four then visually it would look better and read and flow better, but it is still excellent, thanks for reading my poem I have only just deleted over 1000 poems here to make start afresh....David
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Date: 5/22/2014 5:34:00 PM
Thank you for your constructive comments. It means a lot to me especially since I have no knowledge or training in the art of poetry writing. I use only my intuition and of course my emotions. I appreciate your encouragement.
Date: 5/21/2014 4:07:00 PM
Thank you everybody for your welcome, your comments and encouragement. I wrote this poem when my daughter was a toddler and never meant for anyone to read it, besides her.
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Date: 5/21/2014 2:40:00 PM
welcome to poetry soup, lovely to read your work.
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Date: 5/21/2014 2:39:00 PM
aww bless, a real nice poems, when i first had children i used to check they were ok every nigth
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Date: 5/21/2014 2:38:00 PM
Welcome to Poetry Soup, Ewelina. This is a beautiful and well crafted poem. Keep them coming.. I hope you find much support here. Comment on the poems of other members and they will return the favor. Best wishes.
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Date: 5/21/2014 12:18:00 PM
children have their own unique scents - this poem reminds me of why my son was little its a beautiful write. hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 5/21/2014 12:07:00 PM
cool but creepy poem
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Date: 5/21/2014 11:29:00 AM
Thank you for sharing :)
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Date: 5/21/2014 10:58:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Ewelina :) - I choose your first lovely written poem - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/21/2014 9:59:00 AM
Hi Ewelina, love the imagery and innovation. The last line, on this poem's amazing, deep... , A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community, as I did when I first join, March 2010. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry ha-ha a special pair:) here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Ewelina Davis
Date: 5/21/2014 4:14:00 PM
Thank you and I've read some of your poems. I'm very impressed and I'm now a fan.
Date: 5/21/2014 9:46:00 AM
Ewelina, WOW, to dream out loud... WOW... ,, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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