Notes About The Poem

Originally Published: 27th January 2021

Image by gR (2021)

This Poem was placed 1st in the "No. 1297" Premier Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand (Judged 27th April 2024)


Premiere Contest WinnerVacancies

the coastal train began to slow
as two tracks merged together
it stopped at the end of a single line
in freezing winter weather.

the arrow on the 'way out' sign
led me through a covered hall
but my ticket proving I had paid
was never checked at all.

I walked downhill towards the sea 
and left behind the train
motionless at its terminus
and exposed to driving rain.

a small boutique was “CLOSING DOWN!!”
on its "FINAL BIG SALE" day
but despite saying “OPEN” on its door 
it had long closed anyway.

I walked past moving spinning lights
that chased and made a noise
inside a place where grabbing cranes 
missed grabbing plastic toys.  

a gull perched on a wet sea wall
shrieked out its gull like sound
it never moved as I walked by
but stared and stood its ground.

the mist and sky were grey and one
and rain was teeming hard
as thick wet sheets of 'nothingness'
blanked out the promenade.

a man head bowed against the storm
and dog chasing its tail
were at the mercy on the beach
from rain that morphed to hail.

and all those places I once knew 
'were on a different street'
with signs that stated "VACANCIES"
and "BEDROOMS ALL EN-SUITE"

I never found that B & B 
recalled through misty eyes
and the park that I remember
over time had shrunk in size.

there were parts of town I recognized
and parts that I’d forgot
the cinema had disappeared
but the beach café had not.

with all its red formica tables
and warm and cosy light
the small café dispelled the cold
and put the rain to right.

there was beauty and some sadness too
jolting memories by the sea
I’d reached out to a time long gone..
..and it half reached back to me.
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Kauffman Avatar
February 3, 2022 at 11:39 AM
Gary, congratulations on your win with this wonderful treasure trove of memories - the new and the old, the things grieved and the things celebrated all against the unchanging backdrop of the sea. Delightful in its ecstasy and agony! Blessings!
Radice Avatar
February 4, 2022 at 12:57 PM
Thanks Sam! I couldn't have described my intentions for the central theme of the poem better myself. :) Cheers - Gary
Gaul Avatar
August 27, 2021 at 4:23 AM
Gary, I liked the other half too. A tour de force in the old style, everything I admire. Beautiful.
Radice Avatar
August 27, 2021 at 11:10 AM
Thank you Greg for your valued comments. I love to tell stories through verse so I'm really glad you like the poem. Cheers - Gary
Alex Avatar
August 26, 2021 at 10:37 PM
As thick wet sheets of 'nothingness' Blanked out the promenade. - Beautiful. Congratulations!
Radice Avatar
August 27, 2021 at 12:08 AM
Thank you Christuraj. I put myself in the picture and wrote just what I saw. Cheers - Gary
Cunningham Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 12:10 PM
Happy memories Gary, you wonder sometimes where did the years go. Tom
Radice Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 12:39 PM
You do indeed Tom. Thanks for reading...A time before everyone started jetting off to warmer climes for holidays. I remember the family holidays with much affection. :)
Edmonds  Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 6:20 AM
That’s a wonderful trip you took Gary, a memory of the past and how good to have kept the letter you wrote all those years ago... Belle
Radice Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 6:47 AM
Thank you Beryl..although I have to put my hands up here and admit that the letter was written by me recently to accompany the poem and made to look as if a young child had written it. :) Cheers - Gary
George   Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 4:41 AM
This touched me deeply. I too have gone back to places from my past. So bitter-sweet! Time changes everything. I love the letter you wrote as a child and to see how you write now. Wonderful poem, Gary. ~ Elaine
Radice Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 4:53 AM
Thank you Elaine. I have always wanted to write a poem on this subject but never got round to it until now. Time does change everything. I'm so pleased about the comments I have received for this poem as I put it down as one of my own favourites. Cheers - Gary
Dietrich Avatar
January 29, 2021 at 9:12 AM
Very good nostalgic writing, with the pain of loss as well. It's weird to go back to a place and see half of it changed or gone.
Radice Avatar
January 30, 2021 at 2:55 AM
Thank you Andrea. The summers were always long and hot as a child.
Kauffman Avatar
January 28, 2021 at 1:42 PM
The blight of change on our nostalgia and desire to return to a treasured slice of life so well spoken Gary. Bits and pieces still remained for you in the chrysalis of happy and pensive. Well done my friend. Well done! Congratulations!
Radice Avatar
January 29, 2021 at 2:36 AM
Thank you Sam - You are so right about the blight of change and the desire to return to a treasured slice of life :) I guess life's places change with time just as we humans do so the chasm between the memory and reality forever widens. Memories live in a context all of their own don't they? :) Cheers - Gary
Watson Avatar
January 28, 2021 at 1:20 AM
This is brilliant,Gary. Such wonderful touches throughout and the 'grabbing cranes' lines made me laugh and brought back feelings of similar disappointment. I really enjoyed reading such sentiments and can fully relate to revisiting a place that has held such happy memories and being disappointed as so much had changed.The last two lines form a perfect ending. I'm so glad that this was on the winners' list and therefore brought to my attention.
Radice Avatar
January 28, 2021 at 2:18 AM
Hi Wendy. Thank you for your kind and wonderful words. There is something beautiful and poignant about a seaside town out of season and all the memories that are wrapped up with it. The poem itself I feel needs a little neatening up in places to help with cadence / flow etc but on the whole I'm very happy with how it turned out. Cheers - Gary
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