Utterly Dispirited

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My heart is brimming with an endless flow of grief.
And my soul has already been deeply shattered out. 
Even short bursts of breathing are rather tough.
My sobs have merged into steady tears streaming out.
 

Desperate to pay respects to the dead at their tomb. 
And weep for hours at graves of ones I embrace.
Particularly when you share the same womb.
I'm trying to thrive as I'll never heed your face. 
 
 
When one sheds a tear, some wisdom is revealed.
I am at ease knowing you are in the heavenly place.
I will succeed and overcome adversity ahead.
When death comes for me, we'll meet face to face.
 
Written April 24, 2021 

Grief in 12 lines or less Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Line Gauthier

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John Fleming

Date: 5/2/2021 3:29:00 AM

Certainly is a heartfelt outpouring, Lasaad...a fitting and sincere tribute to departed loved ones. My best wishes. :) john

Sotto Poet
Date: 5/2/2021 8:49:00 AM

John, Thank you so much for the compliment; I do appreciate it. From the deepest part of my heart, have a great evening.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/25/2021 3:58:00 PM

Your poem captures the bereftness and heartache of grief so well with your moving imagery. Very well done! Blessings, Evelyn

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/25/2021 1:59:00 AM

Clever way of meeting grief face to "face". Indeed you'll meet again in Heaven.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/24/2021 7:18:00 PM

Lasaad, this is a haunting rhyme brimming with grief. I would say it will place near the top in Line's contest. Good writing!

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/24/2021 7:22:00 PM

Thanks Dear Milton for the kind words and the comment, Have a blessed evening, my best regards to you

David Kavanagh

Date: 4/24/2021 4:17:00 PM

This is a powerful write Lasaad, you face grief with honesty, respect, and fortitude, that final stanza is goosebumps material, reminds me of a general rallying his troops before facing death in battle, a big contender best of luck, cheers David

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/25/2021 12:53:00 AM

I remember a few quotes about soldiers coping mechanisms, one that springs to mind, is accepting the fact your already dead, but probably not the one you have in mind; you best tell me cheers David

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/24/2021 7:27:00 PM

Thanks David for your comment and nice words, I recall that same general when he asked his troops about the soldiers effective secret, no one can answer correctly I’m sure you know it, if not let me know, have a great evening With my very best regards to you// Lasaad

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/24/2021 3:20:00 PM

WoW! Lasaad, You expressed grief very well in this Well-written write—such a heartfelt on the loss of a loved one. Were you a twin? Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day-Alexis

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/24/2021 3:28:00 PM

Thanks for your superb and kind words, I really appreciate that, by the way, we weren't twins, he was 5 years older than me. Best wishes and regards Alexis

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 4/24/2021 2:53:00 PM

wow your lines are very deep and express the grief of a lifetime, The bonds run deep when it is shared from the womb, nicely done dear poet, gl in the contest,

Sotto Poet
Date: 4/24/2021 3:09:00 PM

Thanks, Mystic; everyone who has felt such grief knows how hard it is when it comes to a loved one Have a great evening, and thanks for commenting