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Upside Down, Inside Out

Hummingbird hardly heard, airily, merrily extraordinarily effortless floating, near weightless transparency, seemingly without the slightest of care. Urgent persistency, terribly panicky, frenzied and frantic, she's burning through energy rapidly, hungrily; precise machinery executes there. Mallard so lazily, buoyantly floating on glassy flat waters, he glides on the surface, and wanders unhurriedly, conveying contentment, trivial feat. Feet like a bicycle furious pedaling, splendidly, swimmingly, chasing and fishing, he's hungrily hunting and ready to eat.

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Date: 3/8/2022 10:10:00 AM
...wowza....'upside down....inside out'.... sounds like an opening line to a rolling stones rock tune......your theme is good.. ...peace is 'to float weightless in time'.... peace first, is the key.....not political b.s. .......stans sand dust
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Date: 3/8/2022 8:27:00 AM
Very interesting. I have never experimented with this form, Jeff. I liked the way it flowed. The use of adverbs throughout is very striking. Wonderful images.
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/8/2022 8:52:00 AM
Thanks, Milt. I gotta say, I love this particular form, and the closely related double dactyl. A bit more can be conveyed than with the footle, to be sure!

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