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Upside Down, Inside Out

Hummingbird hardly heard,
airily, merrily
extraordinarily
effortless floating, near
weightless transparency,
seemingly without the
slightest of care.

Urgent persistency,
terribly panicky,
frenzied and frantic, she's
burning through energy
rapidly, hungrily;
precise machinery
executes there.

Mallard so lazily,
buoyantly floating on
glassy flat waters, he
glides on the surface, and
wanders unhurriedly,
conveying contentment,
trivial feat.

Feet like a bicycle
furious pedaling,
splendidly, swimmingly, 
chasing and fishing, he's
hungrily hunting and
ready to eat.

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Date: 3/8/2022 10:10:00 AM
...wowza....'upside down....inside out'.... sounds like an opening line to a rolling stones rock tune......your theme is good.. ...peace is 'to float weightless in time'.... peace first, is the key.....not political b.s. .......stans sand dust
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Date: 3/8/2022 8:27:00 AM
Very interesting. I have never experimented with this form, Jeff. I liked the way it flowed. The use of adverbs throughout is very striking. Wonderful images.
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/8/2022 8:52:00 AM
Thanks, Milt. I gotta say, I love this particular form, and the closely related double dactyl. A bit more can be conveyed than with the footle, to be sure!

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