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Up In Smoke

There’s a fire raging in my chest
a tornado swirling in my eyes,
There’s tremor in my hands
and my lips going numb…
What’s the matter with me?

Every day is a struggle for survival
Every breath a mortal risk
Every wound a potential killer
Every venue a journey into the unknown!

Oh say, can someone care to explain?

Is there a new look on my face?
Why does my trusted mirror 
then fails to recognize me?

Shouldn’t a heart beat
lively with love and hope?
Why is my heart like a stone
tossed on a scorching desert?

What kind of a baffling place 
in my life I have now come to?     
On this ash-strewn pathway
there’s nothing but bleak loneliness.


~"Depression" contest by Lewis Raynes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Gauthier Avatar
March 2, 2018 at 8:52 PM
Congrats on your win, Abdul. Well done.
Smith Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 11:06 AM
Well done emotionally Abdul, congratulations...
Wolf Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 11:06 AM
Very bleak, indeed. Scary to read and contemplate---let alone experience. A well-deserved trophy winner, Abdul! Congrats! Best wishes, Gershon Wolf
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 8:44 AM
A gripping emotion packed impacting write Abdul! A reader cannot be unaffected. Congratulations on your win with this poignant piece. xomo
Roper Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 8:59 PM
Abdul, congratulations on your win!
Raynes Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 8:46 PM
Congratulations with this winning write Abdul, i love the starkness and the hopelessness in this write.
Canerdy Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 7:56 PM
Superb use of metaphor and simile, Abdul! CONGRATS! Janice
Mandani Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 10:13 AM
Thanks Janice.
B. Avatar
February 26, 2018 at 10:57 PM
Well done Abdul!! Enjoyed reading!!
Mandani Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 10:13 AM
Thanks Robertina.
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