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Up In Smoke

Up in Smoke

smoke circled his head
addiction’s saintless halo
clouding the future

John G. Lawless
7/27/2014
for PD’s contest – in the clouds

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Poet Destroyer A

September 2, 2014 at 10:09 AM

you are weclome..Linda

Darlene Gifford

August 30, 2014 at 4:05 PM

Hi, John, A short poem, to the point and true. And it will affect the smoker's future, eventually. It's not worth it! I hope your message gets across to many people.

Faye Gibson

August 27, 2014 at 8:39 PM

Really superb, John...and a much different take. Glad I kept reading on down the list. This is at the top for me.

John Lawless

August 27, 2014 at 8:54 PM

Faye, glad your perseverance led you me. thanks for reading my work.

Andrea Dietrich

August 26, 2014 at 5:23 PM

John, this is the most thoughtful and intelligent one I have seen yet on the list. Congratulations. THis one is really special!!

John Lawless

August 27, 2014 at 8:54 PM

Thanks again Andrea for you kind words and support. Grew up with Mom and Dad smoking, grew older without them.

Dr.Ram Mehta

August 25, 2014 at 5:11 AM

Congratulations a fine win with this senryu, john. congrats

Casarah Nance

August 24, 2014 at 8:23 PM

Great and different! Well done John!

John Lawless

August 24, 2014 at 8:55 PM

Yeah, Casarah, I've been marching to that different drummer for to long to stop.

Pandita Sietesantos

August 24, 2014 at 4:33 PM

John, please accept my huge congratulations for walking away with this wonderful win in the contest! Excellent write, my friend! Well-deserved! Pandita

John Lawless

August 24, 2014 at 8:55 PM

Thanks Pandita, for your comments and support.

Poet Destroyer A

August 24, 2014 at 3:37 PM

John, Congratulations, thank you for supporting my contest "IN THE CLOUDS!" Take care and enjoy my blog, "Pillow Fights" If you like or have the time. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

John Lawless

August 24, 2014 at 8:54 PM

Thanks Linda, always fun entering your contests.