Unwritten Absence

I see it right there, the subtle changes, 
As you tuck those toes underneath your tights, 
Fighting behind silences and sickening sunrises, 
Contain yourself, you might cross a fire you can’t outcry, 
I can hardly see those eyes through the mirror, hollowing through like a swirling tip of a tornado, 
As if muffled drums were held still on cotton gloves, 
The tiny twitches as you twist those thoughts, 
Drowning in words to the point you see no light, 
I guess your lips have learnt the lungs of quiet, 
And your tears have tasted grace of terrors, 
You’ve gone far enough and I hope you find north, 
Walking in shattered bones one too many times, 
Swimming through waves like a forgotten shadow,  
Forgive me for this outrageously unwritten absence, 
Pretending perfection while these veins remain paralyzed,
What more of your heart is left to give, 
When you’ve played it like a tune with a broken grove, 
The beastly blues voicing it’s protective aggressions, 
Maybe one day I’ll love you out loud and all your shortcomings, 
In the meantime I shall learn to make peace with breaths you take.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023



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Date: 10/12/2023 6:48:00 AM
“your lips have learnt the lungs of quiet” spectacular line. I think for me this piece of the ones I have read this morning, is my favourite. Very skillfully rendered.
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Date: 9/29/2023 2:41:00 AM
Papi i really love the wordplay here; as i read this whilst judging i was like thinking, wow so many different lines and metaphors that i normally dont read here. Especially loved the lines “ your lips have learnt the lungs of quiet” wow! “ tiny twitches as you twist those thoughts” and those opening lines: who would have described sunrises as sickening? Only you! Thank you for writing: congratulations on winning! I loved this, fave too for me
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Date: 10/1/2023 12:11:00 AM
Awwwwn thank you papi for choosing my piece !!! I am soo honored… I really enjoyed writing on ur prompt… absolute brilliance
Date: 9/23/2023 8:14:00 AM
yes, angst... in a grimace crying out for the moments before shadows became the doors for freedom. Such a window in the the fears, the tears, the wistful beckoning, waving about its hands, clapping for the unimagined, the source of doubt. I can see how this fills in the lines with abundant and lasting flames. Enjoyed the moments here. God bless you with love and freedom, Gina
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Date: 9/23/2023 5:46:00 AM
Angsty write lioness. The question left is can love survive the shortcomings and imperfections? Time will tell. Have a great weekend
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Date: 9/23/2023 3:04:00 AM
Ufff.... are muffled drums like a silent kettle? A lot of emotions and anger pouring out here... when people hurt us, or betray us it leaves an everlasting affect.. sometimes it takes a long time to get over it... it seem this person's unwritten absence is a blessing for you.. great poem for the contest..
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Date: 9/23/2023 5:17:00 AM
Awwn thank you brotha .. soo happy u enjoyed this piece .. hahahah kinda like a silent kettle!!! The kettle is trying to make noise but tooooo lost ..????????
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