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Untitled

Dark dull dawn
Sunset sad silhouette
After you’re gone

Pricking pain persists
Grief getting gross
You, still in dreams exist

Lonely long life
Sinking Spirit Subsists
Where, respite lies

Copyright © Fatima Bhopali | Year Posted 2007

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Sara Kendrick Date: 11/22/2009 7:23:00 AM Sad write but well done Alliteration. Keep the pen flowing. Sara Login to Reply

Vince Suzadail Jr. Date: 6/2/2009 5:05:00 PM Congrats Fatima on your "Untitled" alliteration being featured. Vince Login to Reply

Justin Hensley Date: 6/2/2009 2:58:00 PM Congratulations on your featured poem this week! Great write! Login to Reply

Ernilando Tugaff Date: 6/1/2009 12:20:00 AM Congratulation on this lovely poem being featured this week. Ernilando Login to Reply

Syed Amaan Ahmad Date: 5/20/2009 10:45:00 AM very beautiful. Login to Reply

Raul Moreno Date: 5/3/2009 11:48:00 AM Fatima, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul Login to Reply

Mohammad Yamin Date: 4/22/2009 11:18:00 AM Fatima, Congrats on your elegant poem having won the semi finals. Your poem is sunk in deep pathos which touches the heart. I wish you victory in the finals. - Mohammad I quote a Quatrain from my book Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean printed in UK: Oserve every path and every turning try/ Understand all tricks and strategies buy/ Count the heart beat of desert and aura/ Feel every joint of the earth and sky. Login to Reply

Sue Mason Date: 4/22/2009 10:02:00 AM Congratulations, Fatima on your writing being selected as a "first round survivor" ... smile ... and best of luck in the contest! Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 4/10/2009 4:05:00 AM Congratulations on your poetry making it in the semi finals Fatima. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Mohammad Yamin Date: 11/5/2008 4:51:00 PM An awesome write Fatima! It wrenches the heart. What a deep love and what a sad picture! A well deserved feature this week. Heartiest congratulations. Keep up the good work. -Mohammad Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 11/4/2008 6:18:00 PM A great job on this form of poetry! Well deserved to be featured! Congratulations! :) Carrie Login to Reply

Chitra Lakhera Date: 11/4/2008 6:55:00 AM Commendable job here Fatima! I confess this is what we all tend to feel after a sudden fall. Lovely use of alliteration. Congratulation on being featured. Love, Chitra Login to Reply

Date: 11/3/2008 12:26:00 PM Nice use of alliteration to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen Login to Reply

Sharon Winter Date: 11/3/2008 8:48:00 AM Congratulations Fatima on your wonderful poetry being featured this week. Love, Shar Login to Reply

Michael Jordan Date: 11/3/2008 4:24:00 AM Fatima - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week - God Bless Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 11/3/2008 4:11:00 AM Congratulations on your well deserved poem being featured this week Fatima. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Vince Suzadail Jr. Date: 11/2/2008 5:38:00 PM Congratulations Fatima on your "Untitled" Alliteration being featured. Vince Login to Reply