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Dark dull dawn Sunset sad silhouette After you’re gone Pricking pain persists Grief getting gross You, still in dreams exist Lonely long life Sinking Spirit Subsists Where, respite lies

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/22/2009 7:23:00 AM

Sad write but well done Alliteration. Keep the pen flowing. Sara

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 6/2/2009 5:05:00 PM

Congrats Fatima on your "Untitled" alliteration being featured. Vince

Justin Hensley

Date: 6/2/2009 2:58:00 PM

Congratulations on your featured poem this week! Great write!

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 6/1/2009 12:20:00 AM

Congratulation on this lovely poem being featured this week. Ernilando

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 5/20/2009 10:45:00 AM

very beautiful.

Raul Moreno

Date: 5/3/2009 11:48:00 AM

Fatima, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 4/22/2009 11:18:00 AM

Fatima, Congrats on your elegant poem having won the semi finals. Your poem is sunk in deep pathos which touches the heart. I wish you victory in the finals. - Mohammad I quote a Quatrain from my book Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean printed in UK: Oserve every path and every turning try/ Understand all tricks and strategies buy/ Count the heart beat of desert and aura/ Feel every joint of the earth and sky.

Sue Mason

Date: 4/22/2009 10:02:00 AM

Congratulations, Fatima on your writing being selected as a "first round survivor" ... smile ... and best of luck in the contest!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/10/2009 4:05:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry making it in the semi finals Fatima. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals. Love, Carol

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 11/5/2008 4:51:00 PM

An awesome write Fatima! It wrenches the heart. What a deep love and what a sad picture! A well deserved feature this week. Heartiest congratulations. Keep up the good work. -Mohammad

Carrie Richards

Date: 11/4/2008 6:18:00 PM

A great job on this form of poetry! Well deserved to be featured! Congratulations! :) Carrie

Chitra Lakhera

Date: 11/4/2008 6:55:00 AM

Commendable job here Fatima! I confess this is what we all tend to feel after a sudden fall. Lovely use of alliteration. Congratulation on being featured. Love, Chitra

Date: 11/3/2008 12:26:00 PM

Nice use of alliteration to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen

Sharon Winter

Date: 11/3/2008 8:48:00 AM

Congratulations Fatima on your wonderful poetry being featured this week. Love, Shar

Michael Jordan

Date: 11/3/2008 4:24:00 AM

Fatima - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week - God Bless

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/3/2008 4:11:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved poem being featured this week Fatima. Love, Carol

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 11/2/2008 5:38:00 PM

Congratulations Fatima on your "Untitled" Alliteration being featured. Vince