Robert Pettit Poet Rhyme

Unsuccessful

A lot of folks love these appetizers that are deep fried.
I attempted to make my own.  I certainly tried.
For a viable recipe, a long time I hunted.
However, they didn’t turn out the way I wanted.
I took key ingredients and rolled them up in thin dough.
Shrimp, pork, and vegetables was the way I would go.
Just what did I get for all my toil?
The skins broke apart, and all was scattered through the oil.
Before I ever attempt a second undertaking,
I would like to know how to keep those things from breaking.

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Verlena S. Walker April 9, 2014 at 2:10 AM Robert, Congratulations on your win in my contest. smiles and hugs Verlena

Debbie Mills-Kelly February 2, 2014 at 11:35 PM I love this.... its a very playful piece... great job !! Made me smile :)

Ilene Bauer February 2, 2014 at 3:07 PM ha! i can relate to this one. i once took a chinese cooking course and made my own eggrolls. they took hours to make and didn't come out nearly as good as the ones at the local chinese restaurant (which, at the time, cost about $1.50!). never did it again!

Christine Phillips February 2, 2014 at 8:43 AM Nice poem laden with strong metaphors. It could be interpreted in many different ways.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 2, 2014 at 5:59 AM - It always looks so simple and beautiful out in the recipe .... not easy to copy it - do as well you can - it's the taste that matters most, Robert. - Well written !! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Tim Smith February 1, 2014 at 11:38 PM This a great piece Robert.. Now I am hungry....Tim

Russell Sivey February 1, 2014 at 11:26 PM This is an awesome write my friend! You have written an enlightening poem here Robert! Egg Rolls you say was what you were attempting to make...Good for you, sorry it didn't work like you wanted...I wouldn't even try making those! I really enjoyed reading this magnificently rhymed poem this evening! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!