Unspoken Regrets

as the weight of my breath becomes one heavy mist gathering smoke on the floor, until i holler inside my lungs as if to collapse or disintegrate into a pool of mashed bones… i call you privately a silence totally numbing my senses, through nipped murmurs as we are now strangers in the rain with fractured hands, drunk on interludes of unfinished tunes while the moon in your eyes blinds me, naked. .................................. Contest of Laura Loo: Deep and Dark ll Submitted 10/25/2017
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Barden Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 12:36 AM
Congrats, Nette!
Roper Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 10:25 PM
Nette, congratulation on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
Nusker Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 10:39 PM
A gem of a poem, Nette. Congratulations!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 4:59 PM
That last line, Nette! Congrats on a fine win! <3 Kim
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October 27, 2017 at 10:59 AM
Potent pen! Congratulations on your win :) xomo!
Hamilton Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 9:18 AM
Awesome word selection and combinations, Congrats on another win Nette!
Gupta Avatar
March 14, 2016 at 1:06 AM
Of Kerosene, but still stars.... innovative...and of course meaningful... Embroidered sighs..Congrats...
A   Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 10:14 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome win. Thank you so much for supporting my contest. Stop by my blog "LAST CALL" if you like. ((( note from MEakaPD Thank you ALL for waiting and chilling, while I sat on the sideline. Since March 1st, I moved to the 4th largest city in the USA (by population.) One of the hardest decisions EVER-EVER!!! I will keep short on my visits until April 1st. After that, there's no holding me back LOL -unless God has other plans. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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August 17, 2015 at 11:05 AM
Congrats on ur superb win Nette! Love the way ur pen flows!
A  Avatar
August 16, 2015 at 9:40 PM
Nette,, Congrats on your win. ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
August 14, 2015 at 6:59 PM
Nette :) Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by my latest blog "Poem for One Victim" if you'd like or have time. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
Puddifoot Avatar
April 14, 2014 at 2:19 PM
beautiful imagery throughout, and I love those "kerosene stars"! congrats on your win in chris' contest :)
A. Sharma Avatar
April 13, 2014 at 6:12 AM
As captivating as ever Nette! Awesome write wid great win !! Congrats !!
Walker  Avatar
April 13, 2014 at 3:25 AM
Won nicely Nette and congratulations girlfriend... Verlena
A  Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 10:56 PM
nice win, love ~SKAT~
Mehta Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 10:21 PM
Congratulations on a fine win on your wonderful piece of poetry, nette
A   Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 7:03 PM
Nette, awesome win...PD
Dietrich Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 6:41 PM
Big congratulations, nette for your win with this poem of unique imagery. I really enjoy seeing Chris' winners here today.
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April 12, 2014 at 6:40 PM
Nette - Please Soup Mail me and tell me how the HECK you came up line 4 of the first verse! AMAZING, as is the entire lyric - Tim----PS: Richard's comment below says it all...
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April 12, 2014 at 2:31 PM
You speak with hushed tones and we are helpless but to listen in awe. Congratulations on your fine win Nette.
Sirak Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 6:00 AM
Wow! Fantastic phrasing and images here. The last stanza is incredibly powerful.
Richards Avatar
March 7, 2014 at 6:50 PM
This is stunning, and as I often do, I must read it more than once, to grasp each metaphor. Wonderful Nette! Before I leave, I must thank you once again.....for the honor to place in your contest. Thank you very much!!
Jones Avatar
March 4, 2014 at 11:56 AM
Just simply amazing as always...I love your work nett
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March 4, 2014 at 10:56 AM
Amazing phrases.
Anish Avatar
March 3, 2014 at 7:49 PM
Mystical, magical work here. Hope you keep it up! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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