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Unrequited Love

Wandering my maze of memories
In search of yesteryear
The spark she struck within my heart
Still burns in spite of tears
Hand in hand we walked the halls
Young love boldly displayed
The classes we shared
The moments we snared
Our two hearts swept away
That Saturday picnic in the spring
'Neath the canopy of juniper trees
Our first forbidden lovers' touch
No other eyes could see
Innocence lost in a tender embrace
For us there was no doubt
Time stood still the fire burned hot
The breeze could not put out
It must have angered the powers that be
Our love was unrequited
A storm blew in the rain put out
The flame which we'd ignited
Our love was blind
Fate was unkind
A love not meant to be
That memory branded in my mind
How cruel love was to me


    an original poem by the "poemdog" Daniel Turner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 7/31/2016 9:00:00 PM
Daniel, Your poem is deeply affecting . . . a skillful balance of the sweet and the bitter. I hung onto every line. Beautifully done!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 8/1/2016 7:08:00 AM
Thank you Paul. You are very kind. That first real love for everyone is an unforgettable experience. Mine was no different. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, especially on my older poems.
Date: 2/16/2016 7:08:00 PM
I thought unrequited was love that was one sided. Was it the elements or the Gods that came between you two?
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JEAN MURRAY
Date: 2/16/2016 7:30:00 PM
MERLOT!! YOU MUST BE AS DYSLETIC AS ME.
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JEAN MURRAY
Date: 2/16/2016 7:29:00 PM
That's amazing.I just invited YOU to tea on your last poem. We are in a maze of words here. How does one "fist a pint?" I am not a pint person. Merloy if you please.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 2/16/2016 7:15:00 PM
The definition is: unfulfilled. It sure wasn't the weather. You're just being silly. I am in love with your sense of humor and zest for life. Thank you for stopping by, maybe next time we can have a spot of tea or fist a pint in your case.
Date: 1/31/2016 8:36:00 PM
Superb writing my friend. I've lived such an unrequited experience long ago. A7
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Date: 1/31/2016 8:44:00 PM
Continued thanks. Robert. I'm almost certain we have all suffered an unfortunate turn at fate at some point in our youth. Best wishes.
Date: 1/26/2016 7:53:00 PM
Dan, I had to come back because I forgot to ask if in line 3 you meant 'within' instead of the two word form you have now. Please know that my previous comment is what I feel, I just wanted to see if this was a correction you might want to make. ps. I have lived this poem.
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Date: 1/26/2016 7:33:00 PM
This poem is so touching. Reverent to that first love that lit the torch, but also memorializing the slow distancing of the person we remember. Like Streisand's "Memories", we remember those things that kept us together for that time. Great write and a well deserved 7 in my book!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/26/2016 8:16:00 PM
Thank you for you remarks and yes it is a typo. Thanks, I will correct it.
Date: 1/19/2016 7:32:00 AM
A well-written poignant look at a past love. Congratulations on your POTD, Daniel! :-)
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/19/2016 8:07:00 AM
Thank you, Kim. I'm honored you have taken time to read and comment.
Date: 1/19/2016 2:19:00 AM
Beautifully written, Dan. Having gone through that, I could really appreciate the sentiment in your words. Kudos on Poem of the Day! Keep writing, I want to read more.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/19/2016 6:41:00 AM
Ah, thank you, Dan. I'm almost certain everyone has experienced fate's venom at some point in their life. I appreciate the kind word and for taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 7:53:00 PM
Hi Daniel, congratulations on the Poem Of The Day, much deserved my friend.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 9:12:00 PM
Thank you my friend. I appreciate the fine words. I also thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 5:21:00 PM
Congratulations on P.O.T.D! Outstanding poem! I love "my maze of memories." Just brilliant! A Fav and 7 for me!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 5:24:00 PM
Many thanks, Chantelle. I am truly honored and humbled.
Date: 1/18/2016 4:19:00 PM
Daniel, i enjoyed your poem so much i added it to one of my fav list instantly!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 4:52:00 PM
I am honored. Thank you for reading and taking time to leave kind words.
Date: 1/18/2016 4:05:00 PM
Well written well deserved POTD very interesting and emotional look on first love, cant wait to see some more - Callum
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 4:12:00 PM
Thank you, Callum. I really appreciate the kind words and you taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 2:00:00 PM
A beautifully written poem, Daniel. A well deserved POTD. Congratulations. T.J
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 2:52:00 PM
Thank you,T.J. I'm extremely honored. It is immensely humbling, considering all of the great writers, such as yourself.
Date: 1/18/2016 1:58:00 PM
Hi Daniel: Beautifully penned from beginning to end. My compliments.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 2:50:00 PM
Thank you, Ralph, for your kind and encouraging words and for taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 1:27:00 PM
Beautifully penned Daniel congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 2:48:00 PM
Thank you, Jan. I'm very flattered actually. It was a total surprise.
Date: 1/18/2016 11:09:00 AM
This is well written. I like it
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Amanda Teague
Date: 1/18/2016 11:33:00 AM
Very true you are right my friend
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 11:24:00 AM
Thank you,Amanda. First love memories last forever.
Date: 1/18/2016 8:45:00 AM
Well written :)
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 9:04:00 AM
Thank you, Kim. I appreciate the pat on the back.
Date: 1/18/2016 8:35:00 AM
Beautifully done, Daniel. Congrats on p.o.t.d.!
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 9:03:00 AM
Thank you, Jeannie , and thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 8:17:00 AM
Daniel, you have penned such a well written piece. You captured the feeling of gaining a deep love. By the same token you expressed your thoughts very well on loosing such a love. I totally get why this piece was chosen as poem of the day. Congratulations! Enjoy the honor- Alexis 7
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Date: 1/18/2016 8:11:00 AM
Daniel, congratulations on poem of the day, enjoy the honor !
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 8:59:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 8:07:00 AM
Beautiful poem, Daniel, the emotional pain in your write heartfelt. Congratulations on poem of the day! ...Eve
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 8:58:00 AM
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am honored,
Date: 1/18/2016 3:59:00 AM
- Beautiful poem that deserves p.o.t.d. glorie, Daniel :) - Congratulations !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 6:50:00 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise, I certainly appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/18/2016 3:53:00 AM
Such a beautiful write bringing back these memories. Congratulations on being the featured poet today.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/18/2016 6:49:00 AM
Thank you for the kind words and I am truly flattered. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/16/2016 4:33:00 PM
For just a moment I was back, experiencing this all over again, from many years ago. I love when something is written well enough you get lost in memory.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/16/2016 4:42:00 PM
First loves never die. Thank you again for your kind words and for reading.
Date: 1/16/2016 3:50:00 PM
Beautiful. Something i can relate to strongly
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/16/2016 3:53:00 PM
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Date: 1/16/2016 10:55:00 AM
Oh you have struck me deep here Daniel,I really felt the lines and stood appalled in the end as the scene unfolded.
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Daniel Turner
Date: 1/16/2016 11:03:00 AM
I appreciate the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
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