Daniel Turner Poet Rhyme

Unrequited Love

Wandering my maze of memories
In search of yesteryear
The spark she struck within my heart
Still burns in spite of tears
Hand in hand we walked the halls
Young love boldly displayed
The classes we shared
The moments we snared
Our two hearts swept away
That Saturday picnic in the spring
'Neath the canopy of juniper trees
Our first forbidden lovers' touch
No other eyes could see
Innocence lost in a tender embrace
For us there was no doubt
Time stood still the fire burned hot
The breeze could not put out
It must have angered the powers that be
Our love was unrequited
A storm blew in the rain put out
The flame which we'd ignited
Our love was blind
Fate was unkind
A love not meant to be
That memory branded in my mind
How cruel love was to me


    an original poem by  Daniel Turner

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Avery Won September 13, 2021 at 5:19 AM I like this one a lot :) Daniel Turner September 13, 2021 at 11:51 AM Thank you, Avery. So nice to see you again. Hoping you and yours are well.

Paul Schneiter July 31, 2016 at 9:00 PM Daniel, Your poem is deeply affecting . . . a skillful balance of the sweet and the bitter. I hung onto every line. Beautifully done! Daniel Turner August 1, 2016 at 7:08 AM Thank you Paul. You are very kind. That first real love for everyone is an unforgettable experience. Mine was no different. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, especially on my older poems.

Jean Murray February 16, 2016 at 7:08 PM I thought unrequited was love that was one sided. Was it the elements or the Gods that came between you two? Jean Murray February 16, 2016 at 7:30 PM MERLOT!! YOU MUST BE AS DYSLETIC AS ME. Jean Murray February 16, 2016 at 7:29 PM That's amazing.I just invited YOU to tea on your last poem. We are in a maze of words here. How does one "fist a pint?" I am not a pint person. Merloy if you please. Daniel Turner February 16, 2016 at 7:15 PM The definition is: unfulfilled. It sure wasn't the weather. You're just being silly. I am in love with your sense of humor and zest for life. Thank you for stopping by, maybe next time we can have a spot of tea or fist a pint in your case.

Robert Lindley January 31, 2016 at 8:36 PM Superb writing my friend. I've lived such an unrequited experience long ago. A7 Daniel Turner January 31, 2016 at 8:44 PM Continued thanks. Robert. I'm almost certain we have all suffered an unfortunate turn at fate at some point in our youth. Best wishes.

Dan Cwiak January 26, 2016 at 7:53 PM Dan, I had to come back because I forgot to ask if in line 3 you meant 'within' instead of the two word form you have now. Please know that my previous comment is what I feel, I just wanted to see if this was a correction you might want to make. ps. I have lived this poem.

Dan Cwiak January 26, 2016 at 7:33 PM This poem is so touching. Reverent to that first love that lit the torch, but also memorializing the slow distancing of the person we remember. Like Streisand's "Memories", we remember those things that kept us together for that time. Great write and a well deserved 7 in my book! Daniel Turner January 26, 2016 at 8:16 PM Thank you for you remarks and yes it is a typo. Thanks, I will correct it.

Kp Nunez January 19, 2016 at 7:32 AM A well-written poignant look at a past love. Congratulations on your POTD, Daniel! :-) Daniel Turner January 19, 2016 at 8:07 AM Thank you, Kim. I'm honored you have taken time to read and comment.

Dan Cwiak January 19, 2016 at 2:19 AM Beautifully written, Dan. Having gone through that, I could really appreciate the sentiment in your words. Kudos on Poem of the Day! Keep writing, I want to read more. Daniel Turner January 19, 2016 at 6:41 AM Ah, thank you, Dan. I'm almost certain everyone has experienced fate's venom at some point in their life. I appreciate the kind word and for taking the time to read and comment.

Vladislav Raven January 18, 2016 at 7:53 PM Hi Daniel, congratulations on the Poem Of The Day, much deserved my friend. Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 9:12 PM Thank you my friend. I appreciate the fine words. I also thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Ogaga Eruteya January 18, 2016 at 4:19 PM Daniel, i enjoyed your poem so much i added it to one of my fav list instantly! Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 4:52 PM I am honored. Thank you for reading and taking time to leave kind words.

Callum Fairclough January 18, 2016 at 4:05 PM Well written well deserved POTD very interesting and emotional look on first love, cant wait to see some more - Callum Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 4:12 PM Thank you, Callum. I really appreciate the kind words and you taking the time to read and comment.

Ralph Sergi January 18, 2016 at 1:58 PM Hi Daniel: Beautifully penned from beginning to end. My compliments. Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 2:50 PM Thank you, Ralph, for your kind and encouraging words and for taking the time to read and comment.

Jan Allison January 18, 2016 at 1:27 PM Beautifully penned Daniel congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 2:48 PM Thank you, Jan. I'm very flattered actually. It was a total surprise.

Amanda Teague January 18, 2016 at 11:09 AM This is well written. I like it Amanda Teague January 18, 2016 at 11:33 AM Very true you are right my friend Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 11:24 AM Thank you,Amanda. First love memories last forever.

Kim Cramb January 18, 2016 at 8:45 AM Well written :) Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 9:04 AM Thank you, Kim. I appreciate the pat on the back.

Jeannie Cronin January 18, 2016 at 8:35 AM Beautifully done, Daniel. Congrats on p.o.t.d.! Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 9:03 AM Thank you, Jeannie , and thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Alexis Y. January 18, 2016 at 8:17 AM Daniel, you have penned such a well written piece. You captured the feeling of gaining a deep love. By the same token you expressed your thoughts very well on loosing such a love. I totally get why this piece was chosen as poem of the day. Congratulations! Enjoy the honor- Alexis 7

Constance La France January 18, 2016 at 8:11 AM Daniel, congratulations on poem of the day, enjoy the honor ! Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 8:59 AM Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read and comment.

Eve Roper January 18, 2016 at 8:07 AM Beautiful poem, Daniel, the emotional pain in your write heartfelt. Congratulations on poem of the day! ...Eve Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 8:58 AM Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I am honored,

Anne-Lise Andresen January 18, 2016 at 3:59 AM - Beautiful poem that deserves p.o.t.d. glorie, Daniel :) - Congratulations !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 6:50 AM Thank you Anne-Lise, I certainly appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

Tim Smith January 18, 2016 at 3:53 AM Such a beautiful write bringing back these memories. Congratulations on being the featured poet today. Daniel Turner January 18, 2016 at 6:49 AM Thank you for the kind words and I am truly flattered. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

Mindy Clay January 16, 2016 at 4:33 PM For just a moment I was back, experiencing this all over again, from many years ago. I love when something is written well enough you get lost in memory. Daniel Turner January 16, 2016 at 4:42 PM First loves never die. Thank you again for your kind words and for reading.

Rizwan Saleem January 16, 2016 at 3:50 PM Beautiful. Something i can relate to strongly Daniel Turner January 16, 2016 at 3:53 PM I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Miraj Raha January 16, 2016 at 10:55 AM Oh you have struck me deep here Daniel,I really felt the lines and stood appalled in the end as the scene unfolded. Daniel Turner January 16, 2016 at 11:03 AM I appreciate the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Joseph May January 16, 2016 at 10:54 AM Beautifully written ....7.... Daniel Turner January 16, 2016 at 11:02 AM Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.