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Unnumbered Haiku Coloured In Red

scrubbing with her hands
red stains from the priest's collar
- strawberry picking


choosing wallpaper -
the red-breasted cardinals
in my shopping bag 



Last night of harvest - 
reflection of red blood moon
in his empty glass


red cherry blossoms
before next winter follows
-his last picnic morn 


soft vermillion  wings
flutter on her bare shoulder
- the first glimpse of Spring 


Its vermillion  wings
perching between  rose petals
sips of ambrosia 


scarlet wings  flutter
upon a dry corolla
unsweetened  nectar




Inspired by  Silent One 's haiku /senryu 5//7/5 syllables
using the colour red  - not for the contest

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Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty Date: 3/29/2016 12:34:00 PM Amazing haiku, Charm. Login to Reply

Red Fiery Date: 3/19/2016 10:42:00 PM Dear Charmainr, all these red colored haikus are brilliantly painted by you... My fav one is sips of ambrosia..really amazing..!!!! 7/7 Hugs Red Login to Reply

Bipul Banerjee Date: 3/15/2016 12:43:00 PM nectar words, lovely !! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/11/2016 10:33:00 PM wowowow, these are amazing. My very favorites were the wall paper one and the vermillion wings on her bare shoulder. you are a wonder with KU!! Login to Reply

Casarah Nance Date: 3/11/2016 5:10:00 PM Really red good! Enjoyed this! Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 3/11/2016 11:59:00 AM such a stunning string of haiku Charma:-) hugs Jan xx7 Login to Reply

Bipul Banerjee Date: 3/10/2016 2:37:00 AM fantastic Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 3/9/2016 8:22:00 AM so vibrant are your 'kus, charms... should be in the contest; you delight!.. huggs Login to Reply

Arthur Vaso Date: 3/8/2016 11:01:00 PM Great Haiku's, loved the first one! Had to think there for a sec! Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 3/7/2016 4:54:00 PM An excellent string of haiku, Charmaine. I have been reading a lot about haiku/senryu lately and yours go very much by the rules...especially 'no spoon feeding'. Debbie's love for haiku has influenced me! ~ Regards // paul Login to Reply

Timothy Hicks Date: 3/5/2016 11:09:00 PM Excellent haiku, Charmaine. You know how to give the "a-ha moment" in each of them, as well as give the sense of "lightness", that for me, is a must for haiku. I'm really digging the "wallpaper" one and the "first glimpse of spring", for its easy-going language ... your muse took you to some wonderful places. Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/7/2016 10:04:00 AM Re a glimpse of Spring... The bare shoulde r ..shows its not a cold weather..and the wings represent a butterfly.Butteeflies and flower gives me the feeling..Spring has begun .Tnks for yr interest B-) Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/7/2016 10:00:00 AM The wall paper one and the robins connection... I could see the red in that red robins`print wall paper. Silent One asked for use of red colour and I thought of shoppng at Xmas..So the season was December..Coulfnt help thinking of that red breasted robins n te wall..I didnt buy that kind of wall paper..but ..yeah we are. in the time of buying wall paint ir wall paper and red is a colour i always wanted.

Anthony Mark Date: 3/4/2016 8:34:00 PM Very very good Haiku's, each with its own poignancy, love the second last one, feels like a personal " come and sip me" challenge, make wine taste wine ...very sensuous ....mark Login to Reply

Lenny Gazbowski Date: 3/4/2016 7:49:00 PM Lovely collection. Login to Reply

Red Barchettadrive Date: 3/3/2016 5:23:00 PM The 3rd being my favorite, yet I read all as a colorful journey! Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 2:51:00 PM Your muse is working overdrive today....love them Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 10:59:00 AM Warm campfire ambers spark...shedding light on blushing cheeks. ..moonlit thoughts are read Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 4:25:00 PM Thanks... Yep guess the message (the cycle of cherry blossoms which wither quickly, and the cycle of a man which ends by death, or a friendship by loss ) , yes thanks Tim. Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 3:33:00 PM I have a lot to learn as well. I was happy to help, if I did...goodnight Charma Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 3:29:00 PM I still have a lot to learn about haiku but the gracegutssite by haiku tutor Michael Dylan Welsch helps a lot..Along wth Deborah's haiku group..found lots of help there ,and my first helper Ruben. Seven years of learning..Still more to learn. Tnks for your input..Goodnight. Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 3:09:00 PM I do like it the way it reads. It does transcend those feelings. : ) Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 3:05:00 PM Read cherry blossoms /before early winte r's.rouch / his last picnic morn. I dont think touch is needed. I cant see sense in the haiku this way.I wanted to transmit the feeling im feeling cherry blossoms in autumn ..And last picnic of autumn neath the cherry blossom before its petals wither /die ..the cycle of the blossom ends.The man,its his last picnic,winters follow(death)..his life cycle ends..The symbolism of the cherry blossom and life.I like it how it is now..tnks Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 2:46:00 PM early winters touch? or ??? ....I see many new ones Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 2:40:00 PM before next winter ? new winter follows? ? Dont want to add adjectives like cold ..etc.. Evetyone knows winter is cold Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 2:38:00 PM adjective such as ? Remember I want to show but dont want to tell..I hate spoon feeding in haiku Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 1:09:00 PM I'm thinking using an adjective before "winters" and getting rid of "to" Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 12:57:00 PM I changed my last, still my least fave : (

Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 10:52:00 AM These are great...I almost fell out of my chair with the priest's collar : )...on the last one do you think if your changed morn to mourn it would give it more depth ?...oooh I have one rattling in my mind : ) Login to Reply Tim Smith Date: 3/3/2016 11:12:00 AM mourning the end of a friendship...but I like it the way it is. Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 11:06:00 AM I do have one published about cherryblossoms and the death of a child somewhere..And I was thinking of someithing like Red cherry blossoms /before last breaths to follow ( or winters to follow as a second line..but I cant see last picnic and the n ..mourn..I was thinking last picnic to connnect with the shiort lived friendships.I cant see a picnic mourm..Does it mean someone dying on a picnic.? And its showing too much then : )..Tnks for reading :.)

Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 10:15:00 AM Thanks Mirahh..Thanks so much,and the ruby reply was for Silent One..Sorry my replies arr doing kanga jumps..grrr: ) Login to Reply

James Inman Date: 3/3/2016 10:03:00 AM Lovely Charmaine. Login to Reply

Miraj Raha Date: 3/3/2016 9:44:00 AM I liked all of them immensely,Charmaine. Login to Reply Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 10:05:00 AM Yes ..or Ruby : ) Charmaine Chircop Date: 3/3/2016 10:04:00 AM Yes ..or Ruby : )