Unnoticed, Unseen

I woke up one day
Unnoticed, unseen
The sparrows were chirping
Did not mind me between

I poked them gently
The sparrows got scared
Seeing them fly
I went mad

I ran out into the streets
Naked and free
Hurled pebbles on passersby
Watched them flee with glee

I felt like a king
In this blind men’s paradise
Shocking poor fellows at will
Making fun of their cries

I was shaken hard
By someone I could not see
I rubbed my eyes
Could see only darkness around me

It was my mother
She put me on her lap
Tears filled my eyes
As I went into recap

I wished my dreams were true
I could see the world go blind
Why O Lord, 
You robbed away my sight
What was my fault, 
You made me Blind
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 1/4/2012 10:32:00 AM
Very touching. Congratulations on the 1st round. Good wishes to you and your poem in the finals.
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Date: 1/4/2012 6:29:00 AM
Congratulations on making it through the 1st round of PoetrySoup International Contest. Wishing you the best in the finals Suresh. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/13/2010 8:42:00 AM
excellent rendition...sunkan
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Date: 11/10/2010 11:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round of the Poetrysoup site contest Suresh. The best to you in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/9/2010 7:31:00 PM
Congrats on making it through the first round of the Soup contest with this brilliant poem, Suresh! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/20/2010 2:01:00 PM
Welcome to the poetrysoup fraternity. Nice poem. Very well-versed. Brilliant use of words. Loved it. Thanks for your comment on my poem THE SAVIOR. Best wishes, Taha.
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Date: 10/19/2010 10:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Suresh. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/18/2010 9:30:00 AM
a very fun write this was to read! but to lose sight is still to gain so much more beauty, the world is yours to imagine and create :). great poem --Madison
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Date: 6/4/2010 12:04:00 PM
the beginning i thought was real. i imagined it as a grown man running naked from birds in the streets.lol. but as i got more into it, i really liked the flow.great job Suresh.great name! and have fun in poetrysoup!okey(: ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 5/14/2010 11:29:00 PM
Very good poem, has a nice rhythm.
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Date: 3/30/2010 9:45:00 AM
Very good! When I first read the beginning I thought you were running into the street naked as a man but then I read on, very good poem.
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Date: 3/21/2010 8:35:00 AM
Welcome to the Poetry Soup Family of poets... please continue to share your creative writes with us all...as this delight tonight...luv.. Linda-Marie "Sweetheart" of Poetry Soup..
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Date: 3/20/2010 7:20:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Suresh. I also wish you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/20/2010 5:34:00 AM
I like what your saying Surish - A fab share for everyone -:)
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Date: 3/20/2010 4:56:00 AM
cute poem --made me think of aging, my father in law has been running up and down the street, when he takes a certain medicine, in his under wear at night. the things we go through.
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Date: 3/20/2010 4:09:00 AM
Welcome to soup...Hope that you have many enjoyable hours here reading others poems and posting your own..I hope just a write and not real blindness...Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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