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For Dilly Dally's unlocking the answers contest

Unlocking the Answers

In the beginning quasars burst forth, primal stars born
Ionised light suffused, a cosmic primeval dawn
Later man came along, looked west, awestruck by the sun

One morn an eclipse came to pass, blotting out his sun
Man huddled together, fear of the unknown was born 
They surmised god was in the sky, controlling the dawn

Intelligence was naive, as sense was yet to dawn
Eons passed, man grew quite clever, unlocking the sun
Now splits atoms in labs, with AI primed to be born

We had no choice but to be born, wake up one dawn, feel god and the sun
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Kendrick Avatar
November 17, 2023 at 2:41 PM
Congratulations on your name being on the winners' list. Way to go. Sara K
Goldsmith Avatar
November 15, 2023 at 8:27 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a write/story. Love your line, "Now splits atoms in labs, with AI primed to be born."  Many say the AI is a very bad things. Guess only time will tell. Have a blessed day writing away...........
Anaya Avatar
October 27, 2023 at 10:02 AM
Truth in your compilation of man, the poetry is sweet. I do see those three words used often in your poems. B0l in DD's contest. I take it back I think this is brilliant for the contest! xhugs
Kavanagh  Avatar
October 27, 2023 at 12:30 PM
She certainly is clever, every poem she writes has deeper meaning, she taps into the very fabric of reality without realising it sometimes, give this one a try if you find the time!
Anaya Avatar
October 27, 2023 at 11:24 AM
DD is creative with her contests, she's so clever. A revelation by the end of the poem, interesting form alright, glad it doesn't have to rhyme. I wanted to try it.
Kavanagh  Avatar
October 27, 2023 at 10:40 AM
I use them quite a lot Anaya, alongside a few others I mentioned in the poem, not familiar with this form, found it tough, cheers David
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