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Universe Design

conch shell empty
bleached nearly white
universe design

center dot
evenly spaced planets
clockwise enlarging

spiraling universe
sun center dot
gray, tan swirling

colors of Conch Shell
soft delicate
neutral

For: Charles Henderson's
       String Haiku

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Kash Poet Date: 2/5/2011 12:54:00 PM This one is amazing Sara!Must be a winner in the contest!--kashinath Login to Reply

Carol Fillmore Date: 2/3/2011 9:23:00 AM really good one! best of luck in the contest Sara! Login to Reply

James Tate Date: 2/3/2011 4:49:00 AM Sara, let me quickly apologize for asking you to visit my dandelion poem, only too late to realize you had already done so. When you get my age you'll understand. Now to your Conch Shell--I love it. You've compared it to the universe in a clever way. Good show. Login to Reply

Gert W. Knop Date: 2/1/2011 9:41:00 AM Hi Sara, a nicely written Renga you have penned here (a "String Haiku" is called a Renga). Also you did not really follow the rules (5-7-5 Syllables), I enjoyed the read much! Keep your creative pen running and thank you for your kind comments!...Have a great week and best of luck in the contest!...Gert Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 1/31/2011 5:56:00 PM BeaUTIFUL idea, Sara, Good luck in the contest. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/30/2011 8:36:00 PM I really enjoyed this one, Sara. How nice it is. I was imagining that the conch shell had a design on it similar to the spiraling universe. Best of luck in the contest. It sure looks like a winner to me! Luv ,Andrea Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 1/30/2011 1:50:00 PM Wonderful multiple haiku the theme being connected throughout, Sara. Good lucjk in the contest, Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/30/2011 1:43:00 PM Wow!! I love the way you describe the swirling designs of both the conch shell and the Milky Way. Awesome, Sara. If this is for Charles' contest, he wanted four verses. Hope to see your poem in the winners' circle, dear. Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 1/30/2011 1:29:00 PM splendid array of haikus done with art and substance, sara... enjoyed this page with delight! best winning wishes.. hope you're fine! :) huggs, nette Login to Reply