Uninvited Loss

You were out shoveling snow 
Exhausted you lay down for a rest
Heart was exerted too much
You had no idea that the end was near

You were healthy and robust
Never heeded heard warnings
I hope you felt no pain 
As you drew your last breath

News of your death came
Massive heart attack in your sleep
Denial and shock registered first
Anguish and sorrow followed

Unbearable pain, heart shattered
Scalding tears, immense grief
Unwelcome change, life altered forever
A daughter left without her dad
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Clemons Avatar
September 15, 2013 at 10:35 AM
Deep poem, Cecilia, the description of a lost one is described excellently. Enjoyable poem overall. Check out some of mine, might find some you like. Peace.
A   Avatar
June 26, 2013 at 4:37 PM
Hi Cecilia, this is a deep poem... Linda
Lamoureux Avatar
April 4, 2013 at 7:58 AM
Very moving and a cautionary tale for those of us that don't visit our doctors.
Jordan Avatar
March 13, 2013 at 8:24 AM
Loss of a father is indeed a very sad part of lfe. It has been for me. Very touching. Jack
Dietrich Avatar
November 22, 2012 at 8:31 AM
CAme back to this sad one of yours but to wish you happy Thanksgiving. Sorry I can't be here as much as I'd like. Are you as busy as I am right now?
Kearley Avatar
November 21, 2012 at 9:15 AM
Oh,very heartfelt write there Cecilia..That uninvited loss can be so very painful. :o( Very nice write...
Cavanaugh Avatar
November 8, 2012 at 9:36 AM
Loss is such a bitter pill. So, many of my friends and family are passing on these days. I keep thinking that I should retire while I'm still breathing. Your thought provoking poem gives me more motivation to retire. Excellent!
Guzzi Avatar
November 7, 2012 at 12:08 PM
The stress of life can sometimes be TOO much, thanks so much for your kind comments. Light & Love
Dietrich Avatar
November 6, 2012 at 2:45 PM
wow, you told this with amazing descriptiveness. We can feel your loss. It's such a shock to lose a loved one unexpectedly. that happened with my 33 year old brother. Luv, andrea
Macfarlane Avatar
November 6, 2012 at 3:01 PM
Thanks Andrea....so sorry to hear about your brother and your loss, he was so young. Big hug to you. Luv, Cecilia
Flach Avatar
November 5, 2012 at 2:14 PM
Touching - and close to home - only, I was the one shovelling. Lucky for me I called the Dr and two stents later moved to where it doesn't snow.
Macfarlane Avatar
November 6, 2012 at 3:03 PM
So glad you are with us today to share your wonderful gift of writing Joe. Hugs
Andresen Avatar
November 5, 2012 at 11:01 AM
It's very, very hard work --- dangerous for heart --- sad but,well written Cecilia. --- Have a nice new week - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Macfarlane Avatar
November 6, 2012 at 3:08 PM
Thanks Anne Lise....hope you week is wonderful! Cecilia xo
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