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uniform silence dawn’s blatant bugle exhales forcefully revoking sleep recruits jump to feet bounce a quarter off their sheets commander shows no bias

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Date: 10/9/2023 7:56:00 PM
Ha, ha. Brings back memories. First of camp, then of army barracks. I wonder, do they use crypto-coins now?! lol.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/10/2023 9:26:00 AM
Thanks for your service! Crypto-coins…lol! Will they bounce high or low? Thanks for your service…salute! ;)
Date: 10/9/2023 6:36:00 PM
Ugh, military..I respect them, but they sure do go through a lot...they're our country's heroes.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/10/2023 9:28:00 AM
Navy boot camp wasn’t as intimidating as others. I just watched the series “The Pacific.” What those marines went through, they never truly were paid enough for. God bless those in harms way.
Date: 10/9/2023 3:13:00 AM
Beautiful sedoka! Creative imagery, i can feel the uniform silence and those exhales. As dawn breaks. what an intriguing write! Love this
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/9/2023 6:54:00 AM
I appreciate you! Thank you! Love writing brief forms.
Date: 10/8/2023 3:25:00 PM
wonderful poem, i could hear them, yann
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 7:02:00 PM
Thanks, Yann!
Date: 10/8/2023 2:55:00 PM
I liked the phrase 'uniform silence.' Just a clever Sedoka. Nicely done, Sara
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 7:02:00 PM
Thank you, Sara!
Date: 10/8/2023 1:24:00 PM
oh this is so cool, I really like this, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 2:52:00 PM
Thanks so much, Andrea!

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