Unfettered

“Like free roaming stallions - my liberated dreams.” Apprehensive, I lay my weary head on the pillow of each long and restless night embittered by pursual of revenge till forgiveness came and spurred my demons’ flight. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: One and One Sponsor: Rick Parise © 3rd September 2016

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/27/2016 3:53:00 PM

Spiritually deep poem, Paul. Full of much wisdom and humanity. Excellent write my friend. Great title as well. I was trained in the editorial arts. And one word captions/titles should say it all, what a poem is about. Hats off to you. Love your work as always. Much love to you. RW

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2016 10:03:00 AM

Thank you, Freddie; your comments always make much sense. Your visits are appreciated. Best regards // paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/5/2016 9:46:00 PM

I cannot take this as a personal experience for you because I simply cannot imagine you as vengeful - I'm trying. But, wise you are and I'm thinking the write stems from that. It is a very good one, Paul ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2016 11:10:00 AM

You are right, CayCay...it's not part of my character to be vengeful or unforgiving! Perhaps I am too kind at times, and people try taking advantage of that...but I'm learning as I get older:) Thank you for the lovely complimentary remarks! ~ Regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/4/2016 9:46:00 PM

Paul, I am at a loss for words, you have said in 4 lines something so eloquent and filled with wisdom. A7

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2016 10:40:00 AM

Thank you, Arthur; your generosity is truly appreciated:) ~ Regards // paul

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 9/4/2016 3:11:00 PM

Wow I see! What an idea. ! Revenge thoughts n demons abandoned for forgiveness. Hard but a challenge to answer,. Kudos for this inspiring muse. Nice to read from u again,

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2016 5:20:00 PM

Many thanks for the lovely comments, my friend; thank you for a pleasant visit. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/4/2016 3:52:00 AM

This poem is outstanding Paul! I can tell this contest inspired you. I love both your quote and your stanza! Bravo! 7 ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2016 5:17:00 PM

I bow to your generous praise, Connie:) Thank you! Warm regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 9/3/2016 10:32:00 PM

Yes. Unfortunately I have been busy. I've been missing out on some good poetry by the looks of it, Paul. A great visual in the end about forgiveness' might upstaging revenges' cowardice ... and a timeless moral as well.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2016 4:51:00 PM

Thank you for your insightful feedback, Timothy. Always a pleasure to have you stopping by. Just finished reading your short story...excellent! Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/3/2016 7:37:00 PM

Paul, there is a song called "If wishes were horses only dreamers would ride." That was my first thought. The second was forgiveness works wonders. I enjoyed your poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2016 4:30:00 PM

Not being able to forgive can become our worst enemy, Daniel! It is forgiveness that sets us free. Thank you for stopping by with a 'like'. All the best. // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/3/2016 6:57:00 PM

Hi Paul, This is good entry for the contest theme. Nice flow and content. I wish you the best of luck in contest. A Big seven:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2016 4:00:00 PM

I am pleased that you like it, Alexis; thank you for the 7 and best wishes:) Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 9/3/2016 6:24:00 PM

Forgiveness is the key..brilliant write, Paul! Big 7 and good luck in the contest:)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2016 3:58:00 PM

Thank you, Laura, for the lovely feedback, and for being the first to comment:) Regards // paul