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Unfaithful

big dark clouds hovered over my tiny house, it paled to the storm within due to an unfaithful spouse.

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Beryl Edmonds

Date: 10/8/2021 7:39:00 AM

A moving couplet Alexis, written so well… Belle

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/7/2021 9:45:00 PM

great couplet penned here, Alexis! Now, what do we do with the polyamorous spouse?

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/7/2021 8:39:00 PM

Oh this one is so creative Alexis. Double trouble within and without. Excellent metaphor. Blessings xxoo

Rico Leffanta

Date: 10/7/2021 11:44:00 AM

aka The Louse? (The sooner you know, the better for you!)Aloha!

David Kavanagh

Date: 10/7/2021 9:23:00 AM

Indeed Alexis, a wonderful expressive couplet, a home will implode if structure loses its integrity, even if the house is left standing, cheers David

Chris Green

Date: 10/7/2021 7:04:00 AM

Sad but well crafted my friend

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/7/2021 6:28:00 AM

There is no worse storm Alexis, only you can make the sun shine again. Tom

Supraja Kannan

Date: 10/7/2021 6:26:00 AM

Deep and poignant but beautifully penned,,Alexis ...

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/7/2021 4:14:00 AM

Powerful thought, Alexis--A storm within hurts much more.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/7/2021 3:17:00 AM

Dear Alexis, no greater pain to endure then the pain of unfaithfulness. Once the trust has been breached it is hard to trust again. What a ink deep emotion penned here. Thank you for bearing your heart.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/6/2021 11:02:00 PM

A storm is better than a broken heart.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/6/2021 8:26:00 PM

I hope this is only poetry, I have been there and lived under those clouds!!!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/6/2021 7:47:00 PM

The storm inside so much more severe!

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 10/6/2021 5:27:00 PM

So much chaos and emotion is captured in just two lines, Alexis. An awesome couplet. Best wishes, Evelyn :=)

Jan Allison

Date: 10/6/2021 5:04:00 PM

ouch hard hitting one alexis:-( hugs Jan xx

Hilo Poet

Date: 10/6/2021 4:50:00 PM

Yikes! Suggest widening the drainage pipe, quite effective during any deluge. Metaphorically, neatly wrapped, Alexis! Peace always my friend, Aloha!