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Unease

It’s the way your eyes light up when you see her, How a smile blooms on your face. It’s the way you look at her (when you think I’m not looking), And how she holds your gaze. It’s the way you talk to her, How you always sound like you’re high, And the way you hug her tighter, When it’s time to say good-bye. It’s the way you refuse to tell me Anything that she said, And the way your eyes look distant When we’re together later in bed. It’s the way you take your ring off, And “forget” to put it back on, And the way my heart is squeezing, Knowing you’ll soon be gone. 6/28/12 For Paula’s “Unease” contest

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Date: 8/5/2013 1:43:00 PM
Vanishing love... aptly expressive.
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Date: 7/7/2012 10:35:00 PM
heeeeeeeeeeeeeyyyyyyyyy hhhhhhheeeeeeey hi..pd
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Date: 7/3/2012 1:35:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the "Unease" contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/2/2012 11:22:00 AM
The way you write this poem.....will give all a smile...and say thank you for this words. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 7/2/2012 8:42:00 AM
unease seems to be a bit of an understatement good luck in contest hope it is not factual poem
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Date: 6/30/2012 5:56:00 AM
Susan congrats on your win, an excellent write...David
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Date: 6/30/2012 2:07:00 AM
Whoa! ...uh...this is enough to cause triple unease. Congrats on your win Susan!
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Date: 6/30/2012 12:52:00 AM
All RIGHT, SUSAN, you got it, girlfriend!!! Congrats on your win with this amazing poem
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Date: 6/30/2012 12:28:00 AM
Congrats on your win!! I actually loved this poem of yours!!
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Date: 6/29/2012 9:49:00 PM
AWEE...SUSAN, congratulations with your wonderful win in Paula's unease contest..goodnight *PD
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Date: 6/29/2012 6:33:00 PM
Can surely see the uneasiness here, Susan. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/29/2012 4:43:00 PM
congrats on your win Susan
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Date: 6/29/2012 8:18:00 AM
Susan, oi.... you better be talking about his mother... or his daughter... but, after reading the end of your poem... I'm disgusted by men some times.. It is funny how they think we are not looking, and it does not hurt... Shame on them. If whom ever your talking about in this poem, moves on,,it is for the better. I would never hold on to a man with other intentions. Besides me and his own.. Well the image in here reminds me of that movie planet of the apes.. Have you ever seen Marks, eyes.. He's all distant ... this is a great poem.. Good luck in the contest...pd
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Date: 6/29/2012 12:07:00 AM
I hope this is only a fiction...but a very good write for sure. Enjoyed & hope it ends up as a winner!!!
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Date: 6/28/2012 7:20:00 PM
This is fantastic,Susan, both theme and development. I sure hope it does well, my friend!
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Date: 6/28/2012 4:33:00 PM
this is a great poem! you've expressed your unease so perfectly and in rhyme, too! bravo!
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Date: 6/28/2012 1:54:00 PM
nervous shaking with guilt,lol,great write B-E-S,best wishes in Paula contest
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Date: 6/28/2012 1:20:00 PM
Well said! A winner for sure....Tanya
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Date: 6/28/2012 1:15:00 PM
Wow, Susan, this poem tugs at my heart! I've seen divorces and some of them bad too and I hate to admit it but sometimes this is the reason for them! What an amazing poem my friend! Great Work!!
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Date: 6/28/2012 1:10:00 PM
Cruel, but it often happens....Well done for the contest B.E.Susan - wish you good luck. - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 6/28/2012 1:08:00 PM
An awesome write here..you couldn't have had a better description of your mate..this is soooo good!!! Love it all the way from top to bottom..I'll be on stand by to see how you place in the contest..winner all the way!!
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Date: 6/28/2012 1:09:00 PM
Funny to me because I'm a male and I could relate to his actions...lol

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