Underneath the House

dragging feeble feet
a silent walk to death's grasp
beaten under house
the last sigh escapes her lungs
whiskers shrivel as years pass
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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October 25, 2012 at 2:00 PM
* AFTER VIEWING THIS SHORT VERSE TWICE, SWEET BEAUTIFUL LAURA, I FIND IT QUITE GRIPPING. STIRRING MY HEART DEEPLY AMID REFLECTIONS OF THE SORROWS WHICH PERMEATE THIS PLACE AND AGE. WE SMILE WE GRIMACE WE PERSEVERE WE HOLD OUR BREATH WE WAIT. PROFOUND, AND THANK YOU FOR YOUR BEAUTY'S LOVELY VISIT; WONDERFUL. MY LOVE, RACHEL *
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October 25, 2012 at 11:42 AM
Sorry for being late reading your amazing poetry Laura. I enjoyed reading it today as always. I wish I could keep up with all the poets here but I can't. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Love, Carol
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October 25, 2012 at 5:16 AM
I guess it is that way but still too young to tell.
Debrosse Avatar
October 24, 2012 at 7:01 PM
does the world end with a bang or a whimper? Really like your vocabularly and imagery to set up final exasperated line
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