Jan Allison Poet Kimo

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Undercurrent of Melancholy

Her husband passed away so suddenly
she pastes a smile on her face ...
heartache is kept inside

Three young children miss their daddy so much,
she tries to make fun filled days ... 
life just has to go on

When she is all alone in the evening
she sobs into her pillow,
and cries herself to sleep

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4. Undercurrent of Melancholy

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10,7,6 checked with how many syllables

11/7/19

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Na Na December 8, 2019 at 7:41 PM Congrats on your winning poem Jan

Andrea Dietrich November 8, 2019 at 9:08 PM Nicely done on the theme, jan. This is a contest I look forward to trying.

Kim Rodrigues November 8, 2019 at 6:27 PM Yes, many suffer with a smile on their face only to shed tears at night.

Ann Foster November 8, 2019 at 4:04 PM Wow. Too real... for me... so very sad... Excellent sharp pen. Ann

Alexis Y. November 8, 2019 at 8:22 AM Hi Jan, This is so sad. You did a great job with the contest theme. Best wishes in the contest. Enjoy the rest of your day:-) Alexis

Regina Mcintosh November 8, 2019 at 6:48 AM So so sad... Grief is the hardest part of living, but we have to go through it to keep moving forward. Bless you, Gina

Lindsay Laurie November 7, 2019 at 5:51 PM Hello Jan … grief can only be helped by time. A sad verse indeed Jan - Lindsay

Ilene Bauer November 7, 2019 at 4:31 PM your sadness came through loud and clear, jan! i hope things don't stay sad too long for you... Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 5:03 PM i was so shocked to hear our friend;s hubby had passed away early this morning, have spoken to her tonight and the family are with her, think it will hit her hard soon, I think she is running on adrenaline:-( hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta November 7, 2019 at 4:18 PM Tears are also Heaven's release. Well done! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 5:01 PM they sure are Rico:-) reminds me of the clapton song - tears in heaven:-) hugs Jan x

Ts Poetry November 7, 2019 at 2:51 PM So sad Jan, I feel for all that have to suffer thru this. Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 4:55 PM thanks so much TS:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner November 7, 2019 at 2:47 PM The image of that sad lady crying herself to sleep is so powerful, will stay with me, so touching, Jan... Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 4:55 PM thanks Michelle, our friend lost her husband today, I think she is running on adrenaline and it will finally hit her:-( hugs Jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu November 7, 2019 at 1:30 PM Hello Jan Allison, yes when a person is alone it is the best time to cry. It is the best way to let out sadness. Have a nice day my friend.A8 Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 4:53 PM thanks Darlene:-) I think many put on a brave face but are struggling with inner sadness:-( hugs Jan xx

Bobby May November 7, 2019 at 1:16 PM Thank goodness this is only a contest you almost had me in tears again, well done sis!! Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 4:51 PM I had very sad news today Bobby, guess that's what inspired the poem:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen November 7, 2019 at 1:13 PM - A heartbreaking kimo, Jan - Everyone grieves ... but, each in their own way - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison November 7, 2019 at 1:15 PM thanks Anne-lise - we had sad news today which I guess inspired me to choose this theme:-(hugs jan xx