Under Your Spell

My love was magical, under the spell of your deception
With every breath I take, you were one step closer to killing my heart
Thoughts of us, used to make me dream of heaven
Now my dreams are to send you to hell

You’re a fading vision, a man in prison, as I was blinded by your charm
Understanding now, you're the devil, is soothing to my broken wings
I used to cry, I will never fly, you took it all away
If I could I would hold you tight, and choke you till you pay

I whisper prayers, every night, lord forgive my vengeful heart
I wish to be free of bitter feelings he instilled deep within my soul
I lie awake as tears fall down; he stole my faith in man
I just thank god, that now he’s serving, ten years in a federal can


Notes: Again Tim Smith was kind enough to allow me to write a different poem based on his poem and the title, thank-you. I recommend you read his poem first before this one. With a touch of humor I started to write this from a woman’s point of view and the opposite of new love, from a stagnated relationship. However as I was writing, it made me think of Ray Rice and his now wife Janay that he belted in an elevator, and upon discussing with Tim, we decided to dedicate this poem to battered woman, and pray that society will condone this behavior.

Sept 9, 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 9/10/2014 2:25:00 PM
Well done, as well as, moving. You did Tim proud, I am sure.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/11/2014 9:38:00 PM
I hope so,hes my new brother in law!
Date: 9/10/2014 2:00:00 PM
Well-Done Arthur!! The contrasts your draw in your write say it all. You've hit the mark with this one. Cheers, Gary
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/11/2014 9:37:00 PM
Thanks for your kind words Gary!
Date: 9/10/2014 7:53:00 AM
I'd lock him up and throw away the Key - total contrast to Tim's poem - i know which relationship I'd choose! Hugs Jan xxx
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/12/2014 3:11:00 AM
Behave LOL I already have a hubby and a cyber hubby in Darren a girl couldn't ask for more - well apart from George Clooney and melted chocolate ... oops did i say that out loud :-) Hugs Jan xx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/11/2014 9:37:00 PM
Jan If I was you, I would lock all men up except me!!!! Just saying!!
Date: 9/10/2014 7:19:00 AM
Awesome write..:) Tim is great with his ideas.. He inspired me as well..:)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/11/2014 9:36:00 PM
Same here, you should see my knew dress!!
Date: 9/10/2014 5:01:00 AM
excellent piece of writing touching deeply beautifully penned piece
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/11/2014 9:36:00 PM
Thank you kindly liam !!
Date: 9/9/2014 9:57:00 PM
What a fine piece...the poem too:)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/11/2014 9:35:00 PM
Thanks Tim!
Date: 9/9/2014 9:46:00 PM
Wow, I am impressed again. Nice one sugar, :) powerful, totally opposite of his poem but real and deep, such as a relationship could go from prince to prison, I tip up my cup to my to poets, you and tim, cheers :)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/9/2014 9:49:00 PM
Thanks Cas, I tip my hat to Tim and thank him, however all of you are such an inspiration!
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