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Under the Cloud

I watched it falling The shower from the sky Aided by the breeze I saw it coming A python from the forest Weed shook when she swayed

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Edward Orozco

Date: 6/7/2013 9:28:00 AM

Simple and yet powerful piece! - Edward

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/4/2013 11:35:00 AM

AO simple, exquisite I love it Shadow

Matthew Horstkotter

Date: 6/1/2013 8:59:00 PM

Nice haiku.

Skat A

Date: 5/30/2013 8:15:00 PM

ha, I'm staying out of this imagery. LOL - AO ....... ain't no way i can enjoy the imagery of a python swaying around. a great creepy haiku. I love it! ~SKAT~

Joseph May

Date: 5/30/2013 4:04:00 PM

wonderful haiku AO.....I heard one of the most feared snakes is the mamba....

Elai Cee

Date: 5/30/2013 10:06:00 AM

hi! thank you for visiting my page, really appreciate it. well...I like how you stared and observed the things falling from the sky and moved ur attention to the other side... u showed how really observant u r.---keep smiling, Elai

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/30/2013 9:21:00 AM

I loved the first one and got scared by the second one! ;) Worded so well! AO...thanks for your visits to my work. Just to let you know...I did write a Limerick about PD for your contest, but then found out that I can't enter it! :( Note to self...READ RULES BEFORE WRITING! Take care!

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/30/2013 8:31:00 AM

Beautiful, strong lines.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/30/2013 6:39:00 AM

Interesting work..Not sure if you are refering to a real alive python..If so, it must have been a very large specimen..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Abdulhafeez Oyewole
Date: 5/30/2013 9:09:00 AM