Unbegun

I said I want to be better, Then laid down and drifted to sleep. I swore I'd rise and do something different, But got lost in thoughts too deep. I said I want to be better, But the tears fall before I can cry. I've created rules as guidelines But broke them all when the sun wakes up I said I want to be better, But I haven’t moved from where I stand. Wishing for change with every breath, And at the same time refusing to breathe. So, if I want to be better, why can’t I just begin?

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Brooke Zerbs

Date: 4/15/2025 9:32:00 AM

I love this, amazing job :)

Ink Empress

Date: 4/15/2025 7:01:00 AM

Dear Ink, (i am also an ink) hah, I absolutely love this poem, so deeply moving and resonates too especially “ I said I want to be better, But the tears fall before I can cry. I've created rules as guidelines But broke them all when the sun wakes up” i think we all do that sometimes, or have experienced that, vow to do better to find ourselves, stuck, standing where we just were! Like your ending says! I love a poem that ends with questions. And youv done that in such an evocative manner! Pleasure reading you! Welcome to Poetry Soup! Sending you light always

Ink Spilled
Date: 4/15/2025 5:00:00 PM

Oh, wow, for someone who just started writing poetry your kind words mean a lot. Thank you so much.