Unbearable Beauty In Red

The first time I saw her playfully dancing in the breeze to the soft rustling music played by the bright autumn leaves. Under the dusky rose sky bursting in shades of red flame, she looked like a quaint portrait came to life from an art frame. While I gazed at her with my frozen eyes without a shame, my heart was pounding like an acrobat on a trapeze. She was in the park where I was playing a football game. The first time I saw her playfully dancing in the breeze. A gust of wind blew her red scarf like a flamboyant tease and she sprang to catch it with soft wheezing voices of claim. It all happened when she was tip-twirling close to the trees, to the soft rustling music played by the bright autumn leaves. As she was running, her scarlet chiffon dress swirled aflame, reflecting the bright hue on her flushing skin like red cheese. She was a feisty soul with an elegance of a dame. Under the dusky rose sky bursting in shades of red flame. Her scarf flew in a flurry straight to me like autumn leaves and veiled my face. I thanked the wind gratefully for its aim. I quickly removed it and she was in front of me ceased. she looked like a quaint portrait came to life from an art frame. Her blushing radiance made her look like a ruby gem. I humbly handed her the scarf and gently asked her name. Indeed her name was Ruby, she told me and next, I seized the chance to ask her out. She coyly said yes with an ease. The very first time I saw her...
Date : 10/23/2016 Note : Entered in the contest (Screwed xv) by Rob Carmack. *Placed Fifth* Written for the contest (Unbearable beauty in-) by Frank Herrera.

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Date: 12/29/2016 11:50:00 PM
Thanks, Agnes.
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Date: 12/29/2016 5:35:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Afzal.
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Date: 12/29/2016 11:51:00 PM
Thanks, Agnes.
Date: 12/24/2016 2:05:00 PM
awesome win, Afzal. And well deserved . Congrats.
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Date: 12/25/2016 11:00:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea.
Date: 12/23/2016 12:13:00 PM
Wonderful piece...Congrats on your win....
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Date: 12/25/2016 10:59:00 AM
Thank you so much.
Date: 12/22/2016 11:03:00 PM
Congrats on a fine win Afzal
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Date: 12/22/2016 11:20:00 PM
Thank you so much, Joseph.
Date: 12/22/2016 10:50:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Afzal. And a tough form handled perfectly. A 7)
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Date: 12/22/2016 11:17:00 PM
Thank you very much, Tamal.
Date: 12/6/2016 3:59:00 AM
You are a great poet you have a gift for witing well done xxx
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Date: 12/7/2016 7:51:00 AM
Thank you Wendy.
Date: 11/9/2016 3:10:00 AM
I absolutely love this romantic write on the beauty in red, Afzal:) sounds straight out of a movie:) congratulations on your win:) a 7:)
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Date: 11/21/2016 6:20:00 AM
Thank you very much, Jo.
Date: 10/28/2016 1:20:00 PM
You pain a vivid picture of this lady in red, Afzal. What man could resist her? Beautifully written! Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 10/30/2016 11:00:00 PM
Thank you, Carolyn.
Date: 10/27/2016 8:34:00 PM
I really like how you described this ruby beauty. AT first I thought it was for the autumn fire contest and then I looked up and realized its title was for Frank's contest. GREAT job.
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Date: 10/27/2016 11:22:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea.
Date: 10/27/2016 12:44:00 PM
What a colorful portrait you've crafted Afzal, well done...
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Date: 10/27/2016 11:21:00 PM
Thank you, Charlie.
Date: 10/23/2016 10:43:00 AM
Afzal, beautiful and very love stricken and incredible colors of autumn day ... Good luck in the contest :) Hugs Eve
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Date: 10/23/2016 9:52:00 PM
Thank you very much, Eve.
Date: 10/23/2016 9:16:00 AM
Hi Afzal, Just coming back to make sure I gave you a seven:-) Alexis
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Date: 10/23/2016 9:57:00 PM
Thank you for being so kind with me. I appreciate it very much.
Date: 10/23/2016 9:14:00 AM
Hi Afzal, This is so romantic and alluring. You captured the feeling of seeing a "rare beauty" for the first time very well. I really enjoyed this well written write. I wish you luck in the" Unbearable Beauty" contest. A without a doubt seven:-)Alexis
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Date: 10/23/2016 9:55:00 PM
Thank you for such a gracious compliment, Alexis.
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