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Ultimate Betrayal

ultimate betrayal in the eyes of a bairn fresh from the hands of the creator there is only wonder at all it sees! curiosity at the discoveries of fingers then toes and as it grows a world spreads out before full of questions its sustenance seems the very air of mystery that we have forgotten or can no longer see where then, comes the fear the hatred that berates innocence causes it to flee from ridicule and conformity once precious now fool. a war veteran, who’d lost his legs in battle threw teacups, paperweights and whatnot at people in his home the child did the same he learned what he lived. children are empty vessels we fill them with our lives loves, hates, they learn from us why berate the innocent? whither is fled the sense of wonder? In collaboration with Ram R. V.

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Date: 12/1/2017 12:22:00 AM
Exclamations here!!! The theme is powerful and the content explosive . What are we doing to our kids? How do reverse back to innocence once its gone? This thought provoker piece is a splendid collaboration. Well done
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 12/1/2017 5:51:00 PM
Thank you from Ram and I.
Date: 11/8/2017 12:54:00 PM
Damn, this poem makes you think.. What an excellent collaboration, I think this is the poem Ram sent me a message about... Excellent!
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/8/2017 1:19:00 PM
I am happy that it causes thought. We thank you for commenting.
Date: 11/8/2017 4:29:00 AM
This is a thought provoking write by the both of you! What an ingenious poem, so very fluid in many ways, and has a special connotation to the effects that we have on children! The poem builds up throughout and has an effective juxtaposition within each stanza, that which I could garner what the stanza is all about through intrinsic thoughts! What a fabulous piece my friend! You have masterfully put together a wondrous poem, Great Work!!
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 11/8/2017 6:18:00 AM
Thank you from both of us. Our children are basically us. If we have no hope neither will they. The old adage, "Actions speak louder than words." is true.

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