Nette Onclaud Poet Senryu

Two Worlds Colliding

softly breathes the wind
   
    collecting sprigs of twilight

            …moon deepens gold mist



within quiet space

    flesh of petal lips collides

        …turning love skyward 



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Contest of Russell Sivey: Two Worlds Colliding 
by nette onclaud

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Kash Poet September 27, 2012 at 4:12 AM Why not increase the number of words in 3rd 4th and 2nd line of the clerihew.

Sara Kendrick August 18, 2012 at 2:28 PM ((()))!!Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown August 16, 2012 at 5:56 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Russell's "Two Worlds Colliding" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A August 15, 2012 at 11:42 PM NETTE, a warm congratulations in Russell Sivey's "Two Worlds Colliding " contest. had fun catching up with all the winners xox~ PD

Andrea Dietrich August 14, 2012 at 7:47 PM another beauty. Belated Congrats in this contest, Nette.

Debbie Guzzi August 12, 2012 at 6:32 PM Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

David Williams August 12, 2012 at 2:33 AM Nette, congrats on your great win....just beautiful..David

Olusegun Arowolo August 11, 2012 at 6:11 PM Lovely write,Nette.Superb piece.Congratulations on your win,friend.Kudos to you.,

Kim Merryman August 11, 2012 at 11:41 AM Beautiful imagery, Nette! Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim

Bl Devnath August 2, 2012 at 10:19 AM Wonderfully depicted the scene of two worlds colliding with beautiful words. Loved always, bl

Carol Sunshine Brown August 1, 2012 at 8:44 PM A pleasure to read your poetry this evening Nette. I am happy I was able to read some poetry tonight and so glad yours was among the poems I am reading. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich August 1, 2012 at 4:14 PM Verrrrry NICE, Nette. I love it! Thanks for my win in your contest too!

Wilma Neels August 1, 2012 at 12:42 PM I am sure, this will make you forget about the rain you are having over there at the moment hey Nette? I quite enjoyed your approach with this one, made me smile tonight :) *hugs*

Sara Kendrick August 1, 2012 at 10:40 AM Winner for sure..Good luck in the contest..Such gentle passionate work..Thanks for the honor of being in the winner's circle in your contest..Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting on my work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 1, 2012 at 8:55 AM simply beautiful Nette luv.. delightful imagery ..those lips are superb.. best wishes .. another number one.. thankxx so much for my big win in Rondine.. it is always a joy to create new pieces for u dear friend..

Black Eyed Susan August 1, 2012 at 7:47 AM you paint a pretty picture :) good luck in the contest!

David Williams August 1, 2012 at 3:41 AM soup mail...

Anne-Lise Andresen August 1, 2012 at 3:22 AM Lovely written in 6 lines ..... always !!!! - oxox love Anne-Lise // Have a beautiful day Nette. :)

David Williams August 1, 2012 at 1:39 AM Nette, a very sensual senryu, I love it, good luck..David