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Two Rivers

Two Rivers Stark naked she slowly shrivelled her exposed vacant mind shed dry viscous tears and filled the empty river in vain Exhausted petrified her and the stream her inner self bared to rugged contraction with one final squeeze flooded the truth that she floated on sediment nevertheless 17th November 2016 5 times 14 syllables howmanysyllables.com

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Barry Stebbings

Date: 11/28/2016 6:16:00 AM

Congratulations on your first place Kai. Interesting perception and metaphor. Barry.

Sushma A. Singh

Date: 11/28/2016 2:10:00 AM

As deep as the river! Congrats!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/28/2016 1:32:00 AM

Hey Darren. We are all similar but different. Thank you for your kind comment, Kai

Darren White

Date: 11/28/2016 1:08:00 AM

Kai, wonderful! It's so different from all other poems I've seen. Favourite and congratulations on 1st place :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/27/2016 6:47:00 PM

Congrats, Kai!

Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 11/28/2016 1:32:00 AM

Thank you Kim.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/27/2016 6:40:00 PM

wonderfully penned Kai congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 11/28/2016 1:33:00 AM

Thank you Alison. Hugs to you too, Kai

Tamal Kundu

Date: 11/27/2016 6:39:00 PM

Interesting, different, brilliant, as usual. Congrats, Kai!

Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 11/28/2016 1:33:00 AM

Thank you Tamal. Many wishes to you, Kai

Jannie Breedt

Date: 11/23/2016 1:28:00 AM

Hi Kai. Phew this is rich. The riddle is still intact but you twist my mind like a wet towel being rinsed in a fantastic way. Btw. Close to us is a farm called two rivers where the Jukskei and Crocodile become one. Thanks for bending my brain

Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 11/23/2016 7:15:00 AM

Thanks Jannie. No crocodiles here, but our local bridge over the same Jukskei was washed away in the floods last week. Many wishes, Kai

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/17/2016 8:13:00 AM

Thank you Probir. I appreciate your praise. Kai

Probir Gupta

Date: 11/17/2016 5:06:00 AM

Figuratively beautiful and rich ...