Get Your Premium Membership

Two Returns For Manchester

Trinity Street, Bolton, it was Jack and Jaya’s first date, Jack had got there early, worried he’d be late, the ticket woman said, to head for platform two, “you’ll have to get a move on though, your train is almost due”, from Moses Gate to Manchester, the world went flashing by, factories and football fields, beneath a clouded sky, soon the train screeched to a halt, with much anticipation, our young couple disembarked, and left Victoria Station, Jack and Jaya walked and talked, round Manchester for hours, Jack laughed and said that “their town hall, is not nice as ours!”, in Piccadilly Gardens, Jaya groaned at more of his jokes, whilst they ate cheese pasties, and shared a can of Coke, travelling back Jack wondered, about a kiss on the cheek, but Jaya simply smiled and said, “let’s try Wigan next week…”.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 10/9/2024 4:14:00 PM
Martin, really cute. It's good to go slow on dates so I'd say there is also a lot of wisdom in how Jaya conducted herself. Smiles, sir!
Login to Reply
Challender Avatar
Martin Challender
Date: 10/14/2024 11:49:00 PM
Many thanks Duke, best regards :)
Date: 9/15/2024 8:30:00 AM
I am very familiar with the places named in your poem Martin and enjoyed the rhyme and subject matter. I've lived in St Helens for the last 30 odd years. I know..I know... :) Welcome to The Soup and congrats on your recent POTD with your latest poem. Cheers - Gary
Login to Reply
Challender Avatar
Martin Challender
Date: 9/17/2024 5:19:00 AM
Many thanks for the positive feedback Gary. They always write about what you know, with good reason. This was my first published poem in a local anthology early on during COVID. I have nothing against St Helens!
Date: 2/13/2024 1:10:00 AM
I was really pleased with this poem. Essentially it is about two teenagers from Bolton meeting up for a first date. Although they may have excitement and anticipation, they don't have much money. Bolton is a fairly multicultural town (reflected in the choice of names). Bolton is only 12 miles from it's biggest neighbour, Manchester (reflected in references to local rivalries). Though Jack does most of the talking, ultimately it's Jaya who has the last word here.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/9/2024 7:32:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
Login to Reply
Challender Avatar
Martin Challender
Date: 2/13/2024 1:13:00 AM
Thank you.

Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry