Two Bodies

the bird sings- -
two bodies entwine on the field
at sunset 


Contest:"3 Lines "sponsored by Debbie Guzzi
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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A   Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 11:47 PM
Nice win..PD
A  Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 11:04 PM
Olusegun, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~
Dietrich Avatar
March 18, 2015 at 2:06 PM
this is really great. I can just picture it. Congrats in the contest.
Guzzi Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 8:18 PM
A perfect haiku! Congratulations on your win. Light & Love
Allison Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 6:08 PM
many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
Guzzi Avatar
March 16, 2015 at 5:11 PM
Aro my friend you are almost there. The joined lines are lines 2 & 3, so the -- should go after the word SINGS that is where the focus shifts to part 2 - also haiku must stay in the present tense so [the bird sings:two bodies entwine on the field/at sunset] that's fine it's only 14 syllables which is fine! Light & Love [please make the changes]
Arowolo Avatar
March 17, 2015 at 3:23 PM
Thanks ! You are the best.
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