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Two Bodies

the bird sings- - two bodies entwine on the field at sunset Contest:"3 Lines "sponsored by Debbie Guzzi

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/18/2015 11:47:00 PM

Nice win..PD

Skat A

Date: 3/18/2015 11:04:00 PM

Olusegun, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/18/2015 2:06:00 PM

this is really great. I can just picture it. Congrats in the contest.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/17/2015 8:18:00 PM

A perfect haiku! Congratulations on your win. Light & Love

Jan Allison

Date: 3/17/2015 6:08:00 PM

many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/16/2015 5:11:00 PM

Aro my friend you are almost there. The joined lines are lines 2 & 3, so the -- should go after the word SINGS that is where the focus shifts to part 2 - also haiku must stay in the present tense so [the bird sings:two bodies entwine on the field/at sunset] that's fine it's only 14 syllables which is fine! Light & Love [please make the changes]

Olusegun Arowolo
Date: 3/17/2015 3:23:00 PM

Thanks ! You are the best.