I am proud of this poem... It took a while to compose, with the last line being given a twisting effect in my use of the word "with" twice in close succession.
Twisted -------- Horrie's words became confused and twisted though careful people (like me) thought we understood. What I could not understand was his appearance - that golden beard become unruly and arms and legs so thin. Another change was Horrie's girlfriend choosing, a twisting of reasons why he chose - a girl made rich for whom he said strict poverty called out her tune. I met her, a cheerful girl of twenty, chiming in with kinky swags with chains. 4/12/2023
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