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Twins Revenge

A. W. Nutter Fog from my breath in the way Temporarily impeding my vision A small lamp, illuminates my prey Unaware, of his impending execution Rons wife, conveniently out of town Visiting a sick relative, her perfect alibi She must really despise this clown I wonder if she kissed the fool goodbye Staying in the shadows around the house Dressed in black, invisible in the darkness Entering their kitchen, quiet as a mouse Through a window, left unlocked on purpose From the first bedroom a child moans Peering at the bed and the sleeping boy The husband was supposed to be left alone She'll pay dearly for this unexpected ploy With the silencer in place I wake up Ron He dresses quickly picking up his keys Protesting will endanger his bastard son He drives us deep into the forest of trees Removing my mask he views his twin Staring into the face of his supine form Before he can protest I commit the sin Then pray for God to help me reform Burning the body along with the gun Quickly driving home to start my new life Showering, I slip into bed with my son Real father and mother now husband and wife

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 9/24/2010 5:01:00 PM
oh wow, I definitely did a double take on this one, Anthony! Very clever way of ending this suspenseful write and aack as somebody who has a twin, I hope this never happens-- enjoyed this --nikko :)
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Date: 9/6/2010 4:03:00 PM
The suspense builds in this poem. The rhyme works well. You could turn this into a short story some time. Thank you for sharing your creativity with us and for your kind words on my poem. Karen
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Date: 9/5/2010 4:31:00 PM
enjoyed...good one!
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Date: 9/1/2010 11:25:00 AM
Yow, when is the trailer for this movie showing ... insanely incredible!
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Date: 8/31/2010 2:31:00 PM
Very cool piece just like 'Tales of the Unexpected' can I request some more pleeeese!!...Alie
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Date: 8/29/2010 2:29:00 PM
love its loathing and hellish hatred...should be a movie imagine your wifes shock and surprize when she expects a lamb and gets a lion in bed...probably better off dead
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Date: 8/29/2010 12:00:00 AM
Really scary, Anthony. And I really didn't expect that kind of finish. Is is a captivating poem with a very interesting plot. I also like the first verse 'Fog in my breath in the way'...you created images full of mystery from the start...I'm going to fav this, though I'm not so fond of the 'dark, scary poems', I'll make an exception with this one. Emily
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Date: 8/28/2010 9:33:00 PM
Oooh, I feel like I just watched a very scary movie with quite a neat twist at the end, Anthony. Great work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/28/2010 8:36:00 PM
This is a most interesting write Anthony... your theme is presented well and your words very descriptive .. appreciate your kind comments on my poetry tonight... my husband's name is Ron.. and am in Mississippi visiting my son in the military hospital for his appendix surgery so severe... enjoyed this piece on this happy weekend.. with luv..
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Date: 8/28/2010 4:05:00 PM
Anthony, very clever! Sounds like your poem here can be turned into a movie. Very deep and powerful story, ENJOYED,..LeeAnn
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