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Twilight's Dessert

raspberry pink sky flat-topped mountain ridge beneath. . . . chocolate crust pie clouds coalescing trimming twilight’s slice of sky. . . . dollops of whipped cream For Brian Strand's SIXES AND SEVENS any form/any theme only single six or seven line poems Poetry Contest

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Skat A

Date: 5/16/2015 12:39:00 PM

love it

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 10/7/2011 5:05:00 PM

Yess....I scream ...U scream...Gimme summuh that Yum Yum Hun Choc'late sun, mix'd with hits uh white n' strawberry fun! I LOVE YOUR HAIKU! Long time no hear...I am in the middle of moving a fourth across the states! 7up

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/2/2011 2:39:00 PM

Enjoyed your creative Neapolitan write..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by...No contest entry just writing out on the porch..Sara

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 10/2/2011 1:43:00 PM

wow. i am so impressed with this. i thought mine was stupid and now i know how bad it really this. if i have time i;ll redo it like yours. very poetic. btw, i can't believe we're on at the same time! amazing! also, i responded to your mail :)

James Fraser

Date: 10/2/2011 8:45:00 AM

I desire to dive into the middle of this poem and eat my way back out. Delicious writing Andrea, have a lovely Sunday :)

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 10/2/2011 8:40:00 AM

This made me smile and have a desire to run out and get some... !!! Best wishes in the contest...love Michael

Gwendolen Song

Date: 10/2/2011 1:59:00 AM

No more caffeine for you tonite, /andrea! ha ha. Hey, when are the next big bdays? ......wink wink.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 10/2/2011 1:45:00 AM

Double duhhhh!!! I knew that...how could I forget? Thanks professor Andrea. You are correct. How's the back? Gwendolen

Gwendolen Song

Date: 10/1/2011 10:40:00 PM

I would rename this fantastic haiku, Andrea....Neapolitan Sunset or Neapolitan Sky....superb picture I am conjuring in my mind..like a sand sculpture mixed by time.....You will reign in this one. Carolyn's is fabs too. Check hers out.....Hope your back is mending...I found out thru comments that you were aching,........feel better. Gwendolen

Jack Horne

Date: 10/1/2011 3:26:00 PM

lovely imagery, Andrea. I feel quite hungry now

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/1/2011 2:19:00 PM

This poem is one of your best! You got me hungry for ice cream after reading it just once! You succeeded in your goal, great work!!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 10/1/2011 1:34:00 PM

Nice descriptive write on this dessert Andrea. You made if sound like a natural wonder and in the mouth it probably is ha ha. Awesome. love phyl

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 10/1/2011 12:57:00 PM

oh this is just divine,and how cute to describe it as "raspberry pink sky" instead of the usual strawberry-- now I want a Neapolitan ice cream sandwich.... well I hope you're having a sweet day, sweetie... hugs to you....

Tony Lane

Date: 10/1/2011 11:45:00 AM

Your view sounds delicious. Tony

Daver Austin

Date: 10/1/2011 11:13:00 AM

I wrote Connie and asked her if we should be receiving each other's poetry on PFT. I'm sure you have posted, but I'm not getting your work. Love, Dave. The poem is yummy. I like the "raspberry pink sky."

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 10/1/2011 6:22:00 AM

wow andrea! this is beautiful, one of the best I've seen so far...I'm tempted to give this one a go (laying off the contests a bit at the mo)

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 10/1/2011 5:46:00 AM

Yum, Yum!!! I want some raspberry pink sky with whipped cream at dusk, please!!! Love it, Andie!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/1/2011 3:55:00 AM

it's like alluding to a romantic scene, andie.. sweetness!! .. we don;t have neapolitan here, just something similar.. :) huggs, nette

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/1/2011 2:54:00 AM

Ahhh, finally a real haiku on this topic. Aces, Andrea! Hats off to you for pulling it off. Surely a winner in PD's contest. Love, Carolyn

Kash Poet

Date: 10/1/2011 2:08:00 AM

I wonder how you compared icecream with the natural elements.Very nice haikus here.Best wishes.

Kim Merryman

Date: 10/1/2011 12:09:00 AM

Beautiful imagery, Andrea! Kim

Margaret Foster

Date: 10/1/2011 12:05:00 AM

Yummy... don't you know it's unfair to set temptation in the way of us people trying to keep the weight off. The dollops of whipped cream, OHHHHH NOOOOO. luv

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/30/2011 11:33:00 PM

I am on a low sugar diet. This poem is very tempting, indeed. What poem are you looking for? Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/30/2011 10:48:00 PM

only you Andrea,,, only you,,, hahha,, oh! yes and Linda Marie,, anyways,,, i'm waiting,..p.d.