twilight tree hiku

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For Brian Strand's 1395 Poetry Contest 11 July 2025

¥ ~ ~ ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ twilight turns to grey ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ old leaves falling one by one~ ¥ \\ | | / ¥ ¥ bittersweet retreat ¥ \ | | / || | ¥ ¥ ¥ / | \~ ¥ ¥ ¥

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Susan Ashley

Date: 7/12/2025 9:49:00 AM

Dear Jcb, your imagery is wonderful both in verse and shape. There's so much here to linger over.. this could be about a tree in autumn.. "old leaves falling one by on", or it could speak to the human aging process and those in the "twilight" of mortal life. A wonderful piece to ponder. Warmest wishes, my dear poet friend.. ~Susan

Ink Empress

Date: 7/12/2025 7:28:00 AM

Omg how do you do those shapes? I bet they are easier to be done on laptop or computer than your phone! I absolutely love this! And iv never seen a twilight tree now i think that would be a perfect prompt too! I love the last line how it sounds and how creatively its done! " bittersweet retreat" big fave it is! Best wishes! Sending you light always

Ghairo Daniels

Date: 7/11/2025 10:15:00 PM

Awesome imagery. X.