twilight tree hiku

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        ¥  ¥   ¥                   twilight turns to grey
  ¥   ¥   ¥   ¥   ¥          old leaves falling one by one~
  ¥    \\  |  | / ¥   ¥                bittersweet retreat 
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Valsa George

July 19, 2025 at 1:38 AM

Beautiful shape and great haiku. As twilight comes, leaves from trees and the book of life alike will fall- a prologue to a bittersweet retreat! Congratulations on your first place win dear Jez.

Andrea Dietrich

July 16, 2025 at 12:26 PM

and back with congrats. Way to go

Andrea Dietrich

July 14, 2025 at 12:33 AM

Love it!!!

JC Brul

July 14, 2025 at 5:21 AM

Thank you Andie.^___^

Susan Ashley

July 12, 2025 at 9:49 AM

Dear Jcb, your imagery is wonderful both in verse and shape. There's so much here to linger over.. this could be about a tree in autumn.. "old leaves falling one by on", or it could speak to the human aging process and those in the "twilight" of mortal life. A wonderful piece to ponder. Warmest wishes, my dear poet friend.. ~Susan

JC Brul

July 12, 2025 at 6:09 PM

Thank you dear Susan, my supportive poet friend. It warms my heart always when I read your profound feedback in my poems. You are an angel. ^___^

Ink Empress

July 12, 2025 at 7:28 AM

Omg how do you do those shapes? I bet they are easier to be done on laptop or computer than your phone! I absolutely love this! And iv never seen a twilight tree now i think that would be a perfect prompt too! I love the last line how it sounds and how creatively its done! " bittersweet retreat" big fave it is! Best wishes! Sending you light always

JC Brul

July 12, 2025 at 6:07 PM

Awww, thank you dear poetic soul, Ink. You put a smile in my morning. They're easier on phone because characters are easily seen but should be done with caution as some vanish when posted, hehe- then u need to edit again ad they splatter everywhere. For the FAvE, I am greatly honoured.^___^