twilight tree hiku

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For Brian Strand's 1395 Poetry Contest 11 July 2025

¥ ~ ~ ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ twilight turns to grey ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ ¥ old leaves falling one by one~ ¥ \\ | | / ¥ ¥ bittersweet retreat ¥ \ | | / || | ¥ ¥ ¥ / | \~ ¥ ¥ ¥

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Valsa George

Date: 7/19/2025 1:38:00 AM

Beautiful shape and great haiku. As twilight comes, leaves from trees and the book of life alike will fall- a prologue to a bittersweet retreat! Congratulations on your first place win dear Jez.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2025 12:26:00 PM

and back with congrats. Way to go

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/14/2025 12:33:00 AM

Love it!!!

JCB Brul
Date: 7/14/2025 5:21:00 AM

Thank you Andie.^___^

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/12/2025 9:49:00 AM

Dear Jcb, your imagery is wonderful both in verse and shape. There's so much here to linger over.. this could be about a tree in autumn.. "old leaves falling one by on", or it could speak to the human aging process and those in the "twilight" of mortal life. A wonderful piece to ponder. Warmest wishes, my dear poet friend.. ~Susan

JCB Brul
Date: 7/12/2025 6:09:00 PM

Thank you dear Susan, my supportive poet friend. It warms my heart always when I read your profound feedback in my poems. You are an angel. ^___^

Ink Empress

Date: 7/12/2025 7:28:00 AM

Omg how do you do those shapes? I bet they are easier to be done on laptop or computer than your phone! I absolutely love this! And iv never seen a twilight tree now i think that would be a perfect prompt too! I love the last line how it sounds and how creatively its done! " bittersweet retreat" big fave it is! Best wishes! Sending you light always

JCB Brul
Date: 7/12/2025 6:07:00 PM

Awww, thank you dear poetic soul, Ink. You put a smile in my morning. They're easier on phone because characters are easily seen but should be done with caution as some vanish when posted, hehe- then u need to edit again ad they splatter everywhere. For the FAvE, I am greatly honoured.^___^

Ghairo Daniels

Date: 7/11/2025 10:15:00 PM

Awesome imagery. X.

JCB Brul
Date: 7/12/2025 6:04:00 PM

Thank you Ghairo. ^__^