Twas the Night Before Christmas 2054

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November 2015 A FUTURISTIC CHRISTMAS
Contest Judged:  12/26/2015 12:00:00 AM
Sponsored by Poet Destroyer 
First Place

The Night Before  Contest Judged:  12/8/2018 5:50:00 PM
Sponsored by: Joseph May 
4th. Place

Twas the night before Christmas in 2054
The only sound being robotic mice on the floor
Our digital wish-lists were hung with ultra-precision
Above the virtual fireplace in pre-supposition
Of the anticipated arrival of a hypothetical being.

The miniature adults were dormant in their pods
As eidolon confiture twinkled their nods
While responsible progenitors with 'Bed Head" applied
Had concluded their thoughts for the long Winter's night. 

Then out on the Astroturf there began such a frattle.
Startled from our beds to witness the sprattle
We opened our security cams to survey the scene
Frame by frame we analyzed what we were seeing.

The spotlight that shone on the new fallen snow,
Made fulsome the green of our false mistletoe,
And, at that very moment a freeze-frame laid bare
A cutting edge sleigh pulled by eight robotic deer.   

Its jovial driver was dressed all in scarlet;
I knew it must be the Santa of myth,
For he was down our chimney with a bag of toys
And lickety-split back without making a noise.

It was over in a twinkle - he was gone  with a whoosh
As you can imagine our confusion was profuse
And although his reindeer were mechanical frames
He recited out loudly and called all their names.

Come Bolter, come Byte-r come  Laser and Algorithm,
Come  Orbiter, Come Thyristor, Come Thunder and Mixem
As he circled the rooftop in a Gigabyte of starlight
He shouted LOL three times- as his sleigh zoomed skyward.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 2/1/2022 8:20:00 PM
Great. Beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 12/12/2018 12:37:00 AM
Blessings and sincerest congratulations for your win in Joseph's fun Christmas contest, Suzanne - I pray you and yours have a happy and healthy holiday season! Keep the ink flowing, my friend! :-) <3
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/12/2018 5:53:00 AM
Hi Greg; Thanks so much for your always welcome comments. Really cheered me up. Nasty head cold this week. I wish the same for you and your family. Blessings, SuZ
Date: 12/9/2018 4:59:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Suzanne, your poem truly is out of this world, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/12/2018 5:45:00 AM
Thanks Jan: Most appreciative of your friendly visits, Fighting a cold at the moment with so much to do for Christmas. I put you on the nice list for being ‘naughty’ lol SuZ
Date: 2/12/2016 11:35:00 AM
You have a wonderful imagination, Suzanne! I was enthralled by the zaniness of this story you crafted - and I don't know if you've ever seen the show or not, but there was a Futurama episode where they made a Robot Santa Claus. Though THAT future Santa Claus was actually evil and put everyone on the naughty list! Hope this did well in the contest.
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Date: 12/12/2018 5:40:00 AM
Hi Timothy: I must have missed replying to this last year. I entered it into a contest this year and got a placement. This week I have a head cold. I hope you are on the nice list this year. Ha ha. SuZ
Date: 12/31/2015 1:31:00 PM
You've really thought out of the box with this creative poetry Suzanne, it's koolio ~~ wishing you and yours a Happy Healthy 2016 ~~ James :)
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Date: 12/31/2015 7:36:00 PM
Thanks James: I like that word, koolio. Wishing you the same in 2016.
Date: 12/29/2015 5:15:00 PM
Great imagination and awesome story, Suzanne! Congratulations on your win in the contest. Sandra
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Date: 12/29/2015 5:21:00 PM
Many thanks, Sandra. Best wishes for a fun 2016. SuZ
Date: 12/28/2015 11:19:00 PM
Hi SUZ, Congratulations on your nice win. ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/29/2015 5:20:00 PM
Good to see you PD: Glad I was able to come up with something successful. Warms the heart, SuZ
Date: 12/28/2015 10:25:00 PM
Suzanne, a very nice win. SKAT
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Date: 12/29/2015 5:19:00 PM
Thanks Skat: Glad it amused you, SuZ
Date: 12/28/2015 1:46:00 AM
Great take on the theme and a wonderful poetry Suzanne.. congrats on big win!
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/28/2015 2:14:00 AM
Dear Dr, Upma. Thanks for your support . I appreciate you reading and commenting.
Date: 12/27/2015 7:28:00 PM
....and,as I predicted, you did do well. Congrats, Suzy, and have a happy new year. Viv x
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Date: 12/28/2015 2:16:00 AM
A fun contest and some terrific poems came from it. Thanks for looking in. Always appreciated, Suz
Date: 12/27/2015 2:13:00 PM
Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 12/28/2015 2:17:00 AM
Thanks Susan. I appreciate your comment. SuZ
Date: 12/27/2015 2:02:00 PM
Very clever Suzanne..Congrats on your top place win! -luloo *smiles*
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Date: 12/28/2015 2:19:00 AM
Hey luloo: I am in good company on the winners stand, handshakes and congrats all round. Let's bring out the champus. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 12/27/2015 1:40:00 PM
great imaginative write suzanne congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/28/2015 2:20:00 AM
Thanks Jan: I am so happy you enjoyed it. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 12/23/2015 12:05:00 AM
Merry Christmas Suzanne... it's frightening isn't it when we consider how much has changed in the past twenty years - thank you Suzanne - Lindsay
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/28/2015 2:23:00 AM
Yes Lindsay: Reminds me of that saying, "Stop the world. I want to get off." It is reaching a scary momentum, that's for sure. SuZ
Date: 12/17/2015 5:37:00 AM
- A unique thought .... well done ...... - Luck in contest ! - I wish you a lovely Christmas with family and friends, Suzanne :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/28/2015 2:26:00 AM
Thanks Anne-Lise: I hope you had a wonderful Christmas. I suddenly developed shingles.....so painful. What a present for Santa to bring me. The meds are really helping. Hugs, SuZ
Date: 12/2/2015 7:54:00 AM
Great vision of the future but hopefully not in 2024 Well thought out and good luck in the contest, Blessings Edith
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/2/2015 11:43:00 AM
Thanks Edith: Yes probably more like 3024. he he Blessings to you and yours, SuZ
Date: 12/1/2015 7:52:00 PM
I think the future looks bright? Awesome futuristic poem, Suzanne. Big fan of the third stanza. Good luck in contest!
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/2/2015 11:38:00 AM
Hi David: I appreciate you reading and commenting. I made the word frattle up. I am a big fan of C S Lewis. It would be fun to think of a poem like Jaberwocky......it is a masterpiece of tone and intention. SuZ
Date: 11/24/2015 2:49:00 PM
Oh, I loved this one, Suzanne! So enjoyable and imaginative, too! Good luck in the contest :)
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/24/2015 3:45:00 PM
Thanks Laura.....it was fun to write. Happy you enjoyed it. SuZ
Date: 11/23/2015 11:45:00 PM
Terrific, Suz, love the jargon and the style, plus an extra ten points for using 'circumfulgence'. Very imaginative, too- I'm sure this will do really well, no luck needed. Viv x
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/24/2015 1:29:00 PM
Thanks Viv: I have written another Christmas poem based on the old original. 'Twas the night before Christmas. It is more specialized to our ward when I was a Charge Nurse at Moanalua Medical Center. There are some amazing versions out there. especially a called a technical Christmas. http://www.night.net/christmas/technicalxmas.html
Date: 11/19/2015 11:17:00 PM
Thanks, makes me glad I'm celebrating the real Christmas ha ha. I do like your poem though
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/20/2015 12:19:00 AM
thanks for reading Craig: Watch out for that false mistletoe...lol
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